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4th Aug 2020 2:23pm
Enjoyed this! I think “each loving words/you sigh in my ears” was strong and evoked a feeling of sensual closeness. The ending made me wonder why the goodbyes are hurtful...is it pain, or longing? Well done Mayumi.
4th Aug 2020 5:46pm
It could be both i guess. . Thanks for reading and for sharing your thoughts. Love it!
4th Aug 2020 4:48pm
4th Aug 2020 5:48pm
4th Aug 2020 9:14pm
The background picture adds a dreamy quality to the words, which soothingly bring the lover on. Favourite lines for poignancy:
From each propulsive thrust
I crave your strength...…..
I entice you to come and emulsify this lust
that comes between
I love you's
and the hurtful goodbyes.
and the goodbyes
From each propulsive thrust
I crave your strength...…..
I entice you to come and emulsify this lust
that comes between
I love you's
and the hurtful goodbyes.
and the goodbyes
5th Aug 2020 1:39am
5th Aug 2020 9:35pm
First time to read your great work. Amazing talent. Thanks for sharing. (Peace, oral)
5th Aug 2020 10:52pm
