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Sayonara Clouds & Mekong Whiskey
Saranyu whispered ‘Sayonara’,
Then took dawn train to Kathmandu.
She left me with needle & thread
To sew my love into seams of a
Pillow’ed cumulonimbus, thus
Satnav cloud to trail o’er oceanland
As streamed pearls
Swimming around neck.
No planes in her steaming sky
No moon reflection in heaven river:
Arrows bend back to earth.
In sight, beyond sunset shrouds,
Cadaver fingers trickle midday vapours
Smoking orchards to nicotine yellowed.
Branches beg for fruit to ripen, to unburden
Shoulders of nature, cleanse the swing of rope.
A passing cloud rains indigo -
Cleaver entrails of insipid skies -
To ink sari hem and cleavage
Betwixt hills and nations.
Behold
The passing cloud
Foretold
The cloud passing
Then took dawn train to Kathmandu.
She left me with needle & thread
To sew my love into seams of a
Pillow’ed cumulonimbus, thus
Satnav cloud to trail o’er oceanland
As streamed pearls
Swimming around neck.
No planes in her steaming sky
No moon reflection in heaven river:
Arrows bend back to earth.
In sight, beyond sunset shrouds,
Cadaver fingers trickle midday vapours
Smoking orchards to nicotine yellowed.
Branches beg for fruit to ripen, to unburden
Shoulders of nature, cleanse the swing of rope.
A passing cloud rains indigo -
Cleaver entrails of insipid skies -
To ink sari hem and cleavage
Betwixt hills and nations.
Behold
The passing cloud
Foretold
The cloud passing
Published 31st May 2020
Author's Note
ERULGCT 43. Umanoid xx Migraine Sunday scribble about a passing cloud. PLEASE ALL STAY SAFE
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1st Jun 2020 7:56am
This directly takes me to the.. Megadootam or Meghadūta ( means 'The Cloud Messenger)... the 5th Century lyrical poem e.. an epic of the Eternal Kālidāsa, the classic & peerless Indian Sanskrit Poet~ Writer of those kingly courts.. who inspired generations & generations .. & not surprised that the today's poet laureate Simon Armitage too finds inspiration & references this great work in his work 'Lockdown'.. but what amazes me is .. what we say in Tamizh, a literary phenomnenon.. "Maruval" .. woud say that as 'Morphing' .. or Transformation as the times or geographies or culture etc.' they pass.. how the original words get mangled or mutated to different forms of today.. in mere phonetics .. & rarely the contexts & meanings itself... such are these 'Clouds' of Kalidasa .. is a Cloud Messenger.. is a harbinger of auspiciousness of rains.. a depiction of his Glorious Metaphorical realm of the cloud passages in love.. but the "Passing C;ouds" phrase becomes a common usage of today.. a fleeting moment that which disappears .. the more so superficial & ridden off moments..
i see these such mixed hints of clouds here.. but in your own take, a darkly dystopian take .. with the title adding a deathly concoction to it all.. I appreciate the mixed cultural references of Indian Japanese Thai & the western influences of this write. Sayonara.. reminds me of olden day 'Dyanora' TV Indian brand when TV was first introduced in 1975s I hope.. even b4 i was born;) Sayonora neways seem to impart that black flavours to this.. with its eternal adieu? Sayonora to your Migrain Sauonora to all the greys that grips our mind.. but one needs to be careful of too often a Sayonora.. as it begets itself.. in all good things too.. juz me from your poetical canvas of the clouds.. Love ev x
i see these such mixed hints of clouds here.. but in your own take, a darkly dystopian take .. with the title adding a deathly concoction to it all.. I appreciate the mixed cultural references of Indian Japanese Thai & the western influences of this write. Sayonara.. reminds me of olden day 'Dyanora' TV Indian brand when TV was first introduced in 1975s I hope.. even b4 i was born;) Sayonora neways seem to impart that black flavours to this.. with its eternal adieu? Sayonora to your Migrain Sauonora to all the greys that grips our mind.. but one needs to be careful of too often a Sayonora.. as it begets itself.. in all good things too.. juz me from your poetical canvas of the clouds.. Love ev x
1st Jun 2020 11:16am
Blimey dolphin head, that is some critique of a scribble undeserving! Shouldn't have submitted as my head was banging & I could hardly read the laptop screen. I just loved the idea of a cloud carrying a love missive, but it veered off horizontally in migraine throes. We tend to use Sayanora without any depth or intrinsic meaning! That is as all wifette. Me xxx
