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don't
I am an oddity...
simply put I don't fit with people
I really give an A for effort with F results
so I end up hurt a lot
vowing never again will I try
why bother just to be rejected?
I ache for friendship
but there is just something off about me
sometimes I blame other people
then other times I believe it's my fault
I make myself crazy
with the incessant chatter in my mind
it never quiets
I'm just a little off-kilter and people know it
I can't hide it...
there is something shiny about me
I try to blend in but I stick out
laid back and self-assured are they
needy and wound up is me
leave it alone I chide myself
don't try I say
you'll never be a fit
get it in your head they don't like you
just don't
Published 20th Apr 2020
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20th Apr 2020 2:16am
I get this as I never fit which is sad but then I discovered the Deep and you and others so you do fit in somewhere. I like your poems and so do many others.
Cheers
Glenn
Cheers
Glenn
20th Apr 2020 2:26am
20th Apr 2020 3:14am
A sorrowful poem that tells the tale of loneliness and low self-esteem....Odd they call me; as if love, friendship, and life were uncommon. I hope that this gifted empowering poet does not share in this hurtful experience. You are an inspiring robust Gifted Writer!
20th Apr 2020 4:08am
thank you beautiful soul for such a kind comment...sadly this is me I feel better since I wrote this, however...I deeply appreciate the love you show me on my writing ❤
20th Apr 2020 3:33am
20th Apr 2020 4:10am
thank you dearest Hashman hugs on our shared experience we fit here then... I suppose writers are an odd lot... I deeply appreciate your presence here ❤
20th Apr 2020 4:49am
I like the phrases “incessant chatter” and “something shiny”, the latter of which subtly indicates a blinding quality to the character that their peers find off-putting. As for advice, I’d like to see you use a little more creative imagery than plain statement, which I know you can!
21st Apr 2020 00:31am
thank you graciously dearest Jack I love hearing from you I like that you pointed out something shiny I liked that bit too your take on it is brilliant...as for the lack of imagery I agree it's missing here chalk that up to a bit of apathy... I deeply appreciate your thoughts my friend ❤
20th Apr 2020 4:51am
21st Apr 2020 00:32am
thank you deares Kavik for being here and for the love on this write hugs that you feel this way too ❤
20th Apr 2020 5:37am
Nobody fits ... A trillion shades of clashing colors ... I do like the Brenda flavor ... Bless and love ...
21st Apr 2020 00:35am
thank you dearest FeNyX for the love and for sharing your thoughts I deeply appreciate you here ❤
20th Apr 2020 6:21am
i gave up a loooooooooong time ago trying to " Fit in "
What i have done is try to be as authentic and kind daily knowing beings who vibrate at the same or near same Frequency will befriend me.
...........like You, Brenda
What i have done is try to be as authentic and kind daily knowing beings who vibrate at the same or near same Frequency will befriend me.
...........like You, Brenda
21st Apr 2020 00:36am
thank you dearest Tallen for sharing your wisdom with me... you're right I'm just going to be me... I deeply appreciate your presence here ❤
20th Apr 2020 8:56am
Dear B,
Truth, beauty and brutal honesty behind this write. I’d wager we all feel like this. You’ve been brave enough to own it and share it. Great write. H🌷
Truth, beauty and brutal honesty behind this write. I’d wager we all feel like this. You’ve been brave enough to own it and share it. Great write. H🌷
21st Apr 2020 00:38am
thank you beautiful Honoria for such a lovely comment I deeply appreciate you lady ❤
20th Apr 2020 1:21pm
I can relate to this piece I use to feel that way but at some point I decided that I just have to be myself, even though it got hard trying to fit into a society of people that sees me differently than I see me, basically I am just wired differently than most folks as I had to learn to appreciate the deepness of my own soul unveiling the true depth of my own growth and love for thyself for you gotta love you first then go back to loving and living life, for a old wise woman told me that you can't never change how folks see you but you can choose to change, how you see yourself through your own struggles of your subconsciousness and awareness of knowing that you are unworthy..respect dear poetess
21st Apr 2020 00:40am
thank you dearest Stoney for the love and wisdom you shared with me I deeply appreciate you dear friend ❤
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26th Apr 2020 2:18am
I will always give you a vowel of A for effort in everything that you do
26th Apr 2020 2:19am
The dishonesty people spread in order to hide what is perceived as abnormal or imperceptible breeds loneliness, as one can never be known. It is a common act, unfortunately, and the world is lonely. It's the one state we share. Take comfort in that.
