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Black April.
She is neat
So I adored her
Unlike my rituals
Following the
Black blood,
Holding a grudge does not
Mean you can't
Write a poetry
Of a poor lady gathering
Bananas in an orchard.
So I adored her
Unlike my rituals
Following the
Black blood,
Holding a grudge does not
Mean you can't
Write a poetry
Of a poor lady gathering
Bananas in an orchard.
Published 12th Apr 2020
| Edited 14th Apr 2020
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9th May 2020 8:24am
Very nice image to end the poem and " rituals following the black blood," certainly piques curiosity. I used to write poems capitalizing the first word of each line and someone commented to me that it may flow better if that were not the case. I took his advice and I think the poems work better that way. Up to you, of course, but it may make it easier for the reader to follow. Cool themes that you can certainly expand upon in future writings. Keep up the good work !
