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Undermined by a Narcotic Lullaby
The future begins
to creak
I don't want to die
without you
There is so much to say
I've said too much
I had thoughts of singing
Freefall, the flloorboards
creak
On that side if you
have stones in
your pockets
I had thoughts of being free
Tidepools wrap the rope twice
around Willow branch
the rope won't
creak
while swinging
I had thoughts of flying
Windswept Leaves piled
high behind the screen door
neighbors dog barks
on point as the shutters
creak
in the wind
I had thoughts of dying
The thoughts I had were
undermined
By a narcotic lullaby
to creak
I don't want to die
without you
There is so much to say
I've said too much
I had thoughts of singing
Freefall, the flloorboards
creak
On that side if you
have stones in
your pockets
I had thoughts of being free
Tidepools wrap the rope twice
around Willow branch
the rope won't
creak
while swinging
I had thoughts of flying
Windswept Leaves piled
high behind the screen door
neighbors dog barks
on point as the shutters
creak
in the wind
I had thoughts of dying
The thoughts I had were
undermined
By a narcotic lullaby
Published 24th Feb 2020
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24th Feb 2020 3:21pm
24th Feb 2020 8:39pm
Thank you so much Kink my husband suffered a stroke last night I wrote this from the hosp where I still sit❤
24th Feb 2020 10:07pm
24th Feb 2020 8:47pm
This is so very sad and so well written, there is a desperation and a longing in these words.
"I no longer fear death it is the antidote to life, but, I do fear the process of dying and of dying alone."
[Davidn Macleod 2020]
thank you for sharing the outpouring :-)))))))))))
"I no longer fear death it is the antidote to life, but, I do fear the process of dying and of dying alone."
[Davidn Macleod 2020]
thank you for sharing the outpouring :-)))))))))))
24th Feb 2020 9:11pm
Gut-wrenching
I hope nothing but smooth sailing for Your Hubby, I am sorry You have to draw upon such disruption and pull for this Write...but all the elements are there that makes one a great Write!!!
On and Up, keep him well!!!
I hope nothing but smooth sailing for Your Hubby, I am sorry You have to draw upon such disruption and pull for this Write...but all the elements are there that makes one a great Write!!!
On and Up, keep him well!!!
24th Feb 2020 9:29pm
Such raw sadness expressed here. I'm not sure if using
"The thoughts I had were
undermined
By a narcotic lullaby"...
were inspired by truth, but I love the expression and it made for a great ending. Vulnerabilities laid bare too, if so.
I'm sorry about your husband, when one hurts, both suffer. May his burdens be light and healing come.🌷🌻
"The thoughts I had were
undermined
By a narcotic lullaby"...
were inspired by truth, but I love the expression and it made for a great ending. Vulnerabilities laid bare too, if so.
I'm sorry about your husband, when one hurts, both suffer. May his burdens be light and healing come.🌷🌻
24th Feb 2020 10:33pm
I understand your comment he was sedated was the reason for narcotic lullaby I am glad you mention it though pretty much confirmation
24th Feb 2020 11:44pm
Haunting piece and absolutely love the title!
I just seen your comment about your hubby. I hope all works out and he bounces back unscathed. Take care
I just seen your comment about your hubby. I hope all works out and he bounces back unscathed. Take care
25th Feb 2020 2:21am
25th Feb 2020 4:07am
Very wonderful poem about sadness. Hope you have to comfort you. Keep on writing.
25th Feb 2020 7:27am
I l love the imagery present and I can definitely relate to your work as I've often wondered what it would feel like to soar through the air.
