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Infatuation
Last night,
within soft acoustics,
I shared you out,
as if you were carved from alabaster,
as if the words were dust collected at the feet of art,
as if we were too far from where we were to evoke passion
and perhaps that's the truth.
within soft acoustics,
I shared you out,
as if you were carved from alabaster,
as if the words were dust collected at the feet of art,
as if we were too far from where we were to evoke passion
and perhaps that's the truth.
Published 3rd Nov 2019
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Anonymous
3rd Nov 2019 11:18am
I want to say replace "shared" with "stared" because it infers fixation at a distance ....?
I like this; brevity suits you as well.
I like this; brevity suits you as well.
3rd Nov 2019 2:18pm
3rd Nov 2019 9:34pm
Anonymous
8th Nov 2019 10:40pm
I like the brevity in this. especially those first 4 lines. just couldn't see any function of the commas at the end of linebreaks, when the breaks themselves are significant enough. just my minimalist thought. thanks for the read
