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{Just To Write}
If my love were something tangible
And I could see it in the air
I would let it wrap all around us
Like it’s something I can share
If my love were something visible
I would see it as a thin smoke
Dark and coiling tendrils around us
It could very well make you choke
But it doesn’t have to be that way
If you learn to breathe at this elevation
But at this very height of my love
It could be your biggest revelation
To let the smoke build into a cloud
Unaffected by the ugly side of this world
And soft enough cushion your landings
If only, if only — my love could unfurl
If my love were something breakable
It would be like bulletproof glass
My love would be strong and sturdy
Much different from my darker contrasts
If my love were something liquid
It would flow deep in all of your veins
It would be able to fill up your beating heart
And wash away anything that remains
However, my love is not liquid, it is not glass
I cannot hold onto it or let it coil around us
Though my love is strong, a mind all it’s own
It carries me like a river, I just have to trust
And I could see it in the air
I would let it wrap all around us
Like it’s something I can share
If my love were something visible
I would see it as a thin smoke
Dark and coiling tendrils around us
It could very well make you choke
But it doesn’t have to be that way
If you learn to breathe at this elevation
But at this very height of my love
It could be your biggest revelation
To let the smoke build into a cloud
Unaffected by the ugly side of this world
And soft enough cushion your landings
If only, if only — my love could unfurl
If my love were something breakable
It would be like bulletproof glass
My love would be strong and sturdy
Much different from my darker contrasts
If my love were something liquid
It would flow deep in all of your veins
It would be able to fill up your beating heart
And wash away anything that remains
However, my love is not liquid, it is not glass
I cannot hold onto it or let it coil around us
Though my love is strong, a mind all it’s own
It carries me like a river, I just have to trust
Published 25th Jun 2019
Author's Note
Just to get the ink moving...
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25th Jun 2019 11:41pm
For a minute here
I thought You were talking about Your Love as a Love (partner)
I liked the rhythm and the way You summed up the spill
at the end
I thought You were talking about Your Love as a Love (partner)
I liked the rhythm and the way You summed up the spill
at the end
25th Jun 2019 11:49pm
Thank you, Tallen. It’s a bit rough in my opinion. Could use work but. I needed to get going somehow!
Anonymous
26th Jun 2019 00:38am
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26th Jun 2019 1:29am
Right! My problem is my kindle! But setting aside twenty minutes to throw a poem together really helped me get out of my writing rut❤️
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26th Jun 2019 1:13am
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26th Jun 2019 1:30am
Thank you, sweet Ethan! It’s certainly a little tougher than I’d like but I’m glad someone enjoyed it☺️
Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jun 2022 2:45am
26th Jun 2019 3:02am
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26th Jun 2019 10:10pm
26th Jun 2019 10:12pm
I am beyond honored for the RL add! Wow, I’m so glad you liked it as I felt this was one of my weaker poems. Thank you so much, Lagertha, you’re too kind❤️
27th Jun 2019 6:29am
27th Jun 2019 4:14pm
I’m so glad you did, Keith! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment :)
Anonymous
27th Jun 2019 12:39pm
The things we do to make our pens move... I like how you literally showed us your love, in clear terms. Showing the mind what the eye can't see. Such is the gift of poetry. Beautifully exposing yourself, as it were. Well done! :-)
27th Jun 2019 4:13pm
Thank you, dearest Willow... yes, it’s always something I enjoy by making something come to life. Seems you can understand it better that way. Thank you for the read and comment❤️
28th Jun 2019 3:32pm
This is really something, Liv. You've created something lovely here. Such a good read. Thanks for sharing. :)
28th Jun 2019 7:23pm
Oh thank you, Hallucinostic! You’re too kind, thanks for the read and sweet comment!
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