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For You
For You
Times an enemy
that takes away infinity,
Dancing with my seconds
till destiny screams for me
to leave;
And I dream of her in blurr
till the moment will occur,
I wish I could just run,
just leave and run to her;
I greet the mass invasion
of pure imagination,
Just to hold her for a moments time
is my determination;
Fueled by the life inside,
I forget the rest behind
My mind is beat and sore,
for the beauty I adore;
Life gives persistence
to get me to listen,
and to understand,
for her I co-exist
in this Existance;
I miss her very dearly,
and on most days severly,
I Bearly understand most of things
and unsure how to feel this clearly;
we'll mingle in our world,
like a painted plain of savannah;
or conjoin in our eyes
under the stars of vienna;
to a kiss so breathless
in the heart of cyprus;
we could see anything we dream
because dreams are abyss;
When I ponder your smile,
I pick at a rose in my hand;
and when the pedals have fallen,
you're the last pedal to stand;
My heart cant me defined;
and has no explanation;
He always speaks of you
in all conversations;
Times an enemy
that takes away infinity,
Dancing with my seconds
till destiny screams for me
to leave;
And I dream of her in blurr
till the moment will occur,
I wish I could just run,
just leave and run to her;
I greet the mass invasion
of pure imagination,
Just to hold her for a moments time
is my determination;
Fueled by the life inside,
I forget the rest behind
My mind is beat and sore,
for the beauty I adore;
Life gives persistence
to get me to listen,
and to understand,
for her I co-exist
in this Existance;
I miss her very dearly,
and on most days severly,
I Bearly understand most of things
and unsure how to feel this clearly;
we'll mingle in our world,
like a painted plain of savannah;
or conjoin in our eyes
under the stars of vienna;
to a kiss so breathless
in the heart of cyprus;
we could see anything we dream
because dreams are abyss;
When I ponder your smile,
I pick at a rose in my hand;
and when the pedals have fallen,
you're the last pedal to stand;
My heart cant me defined;
and has no explanation;
He always speaks of you
in all conversations;
Published 20th Nov 2011
| Edited 13th Feb 2012
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Anonymous
11th Feb 2012 2:24am
A lot of rhyming poems can sound a bit corny, but you did well with this one. It flows well when read. There are a some grammatical errors. Here are a few
"I bearly understand most of things"
'bearly' should be "Barely.
"becouse dreams are abyss"
'because'
"your the last pedal to stand"
Should be "you're" because the tense is "you are"
Just some touch ups and it's all good
"I bearly understand most of things"
'bearly' should be "Barely.
"becouse dreams are abyss"
'because'
"your the last pedal to stand"
Should be "you're" because the tense is "you are"
Just some touch ups and it's all good
11th Apr 2013 8:33pm
Very good but I must agree that there were some grammatical errors that needed fixing...
14th May 2013 8:52pm
