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Those are some amazing rhymes man. I can only assume this is more of a spoken word piece, seeing as I had to read it aloud to really enjoy the effects of the rhythm and sounds.

I like the length, because even though it's relatively short and flows with a fast pace, it feels finished by the end. The rushed feeling I get while reading it tends to reflect the topic of the poem very well, which shows me that you are the type of poet that utilizes every aspect of the poem to his advantage when making a point.

I also like the fact that the font appears in bold print, perhaps suggesting that the speaker has a problem thinks himself bold for making these statements?

One last thing: the line reads 'Now its mine turn', so unless you intended to use the word 'mine' instead of 'my' you might want to edit that little detail.

Hey Thanks,

Yes the bold is meant to symbolize me for bold statements, but also bold seems to attract me in a different aspect. Only when I write with such emotion, as this, I choose bold because it seems more concrete, more serious, if that makes sense

Also, this poen is meant to be appreciated out loud. It  can be a rush that's for sure. I "spoke" this in the heat of the moment

Thanks for the edit

I'm glad I wasn't too far off with those interpretations. That's really good that you can utilize the way the words actually look for effect and at the same time make a poem that reads out loud so well.

You might like my poem 'Original S1napse' it's a spoken word of sorts (a rap)

If you get a chance, of course. Keep up the good writing man!

What a sad write but beautifully mastered. :)