What you don't think

so very, very true. people should come with warning labels. i wish this would have been in some kind of handbook they should have handed out to girls in their youth! lol! prepared in advance for heartache!

Come inside and close the door
I want to show you
the tools that wait for when your eyes
are trust
and your lips are wet


These eyes
Can see through your bullshit

This mind
Can play both your blackest and purest keys

These lips
Can lie like the Garden of Eden was theirs

These hands
Can banish you from the same - don't move

These hips
Can use your any orifice

This heart
Can shatter yours

With these legs
I can empty your pretty hands

Think about it
when you hear me say " I love you"

This is just a rough re-work but it might show you how to get more out of the poem. It has a lot of potential so I hope you decide to perk it up a bit. Thanks for the read.

Thank you for the suggestion. I like what you did to my poem. I was just after alittle something simple. I had to come up with something for therapy. They don't like it to much when I go spastic. Don't need anymore pills. Once again thanks alot much apperception.

here is my comment. i like i. i can see a few reasons why you wrote it. i enjoyed reading it. it was easy to read and it drew my attention.but this poem for therapy? my counselor would be mad at me for this

Not the poem as therapy , but writing my thoughts down. Fuck them, it would be alot more emo if I had to write it for them.