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Emotionless?
Sometimes, there's nothing.
I am empty, gone.
I have no emotion.
This emotion is strong.
I can't feel anything.
What's wrong?
I am empty, gone.
I have no emotion.
This emotion is strong.
I can't feel anything.
What's wrong?
Published 15th Nov 2011
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Anonymous
16th Nov 2011 1:08am
...in such a short piece. To write a short piece well the idea must be very clear and singular, and here you confuse us with the line "this emotion is so strong".
Was this contradiction your intention? If so, try to clarify it a little by perhaps reordering the sentences.
DP.
Was this contradiction your intention? If so, try to clarify it a little by perhaps reordering the sentences.
DP.
16th Nov 2011 2:19am
