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autumn
~
you are autumn
a soothing cool to a heat that has passed
you are my past
still beautiful
but colder each day
~
you are autumn
a soothing cool to a heat that has passed
you are my past
still beautiful
but colder each day
~
Published 30th Nov 2018
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30th Nov 2018 00:25am
Now this is on point.
( I want to suggest you lose 'has' as extraneous baggage - unneeded )
( I want to suggest you lose 'has' as extraneous baggage - unneeded )
30th Nov 2018 00:29am
30th Nov 2018 00:40am
30th Nov 2018 00:42am
Anonymous
30th Nov 2018 1:14am
A look towards the past, prepares us for the present, as the present slowly leads us to the future. Nothing is lost in the economy of the cosmos. J
30th Nov 2018 1:15am
Anonymous
30th Nov 2018 4:27pm
Ani,
You're soooo good!
That is short, but ridiculously powerful.
Maybe it's just me, but I love your writing!
Matthew.
You're soooo good!
That is short, but ridiculously powerful.
Maybe it's just me, but I love your writing!
Matthew.
30th Nov 2018 5:13pm
30th Nov 2018 8:19pm
You have managed to express so much with this short poem. Agonizingly beautiful!
30th Nov 2018 11:45pm
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Feb 2019 11:45am
1st Dec 2018 5:34am
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