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the castle
Once upon a time I built a castle
It was a thing of beauty
A fairy-tale like castle.
I built it stone by stone,
Ogive by ogive.
I made it tall,
It was caressing the skies.
It was MY beautiful castle,
It was a castle of dreams
every hall, every corner
was a dream,
A wish,
A hope.
You know,
Not so long ago,
I shattered a castle
It was beautiful
Like in those bed time stories
With all its halls and majestic rooms
Made from dreams and hopes.
I tear it down easily,
A push was enough.
Because from all the bricks in the world,
Dreams are the worst.
It was a thing of beauty
A fairy-tale like castle.
I built it stone by stone,
Ogive by ogive.
I made it tall,
It was caressing the skies.
It was MY beautiful castle,
It was a castle of dreams
every hall, every corner
was a dream,
A wish,
A hope.
You know,
Not so long ago,
I shattered a castle
It was beautiful
Like in those bed time stories
With all its halls and majestic rooms
Made from dreams and hopes.
I tear it down easily,
A push was enough.
Because from all the bricks in the world,
Dreams are the worst.
Published 19th Oct 2018
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19th Oct 2018 10:13am
19th Oct 2018 10:22am
19th Oct 2018 4:29pm
I truly enjoyed your words here, and it is very true we build our castles, first from dreams of how we wish things to be, but life comes along and destroys what we have built. It is then we choose sturdier materials to serve as buffers and protect ourselves from things we wish to avoid, and it is within ours newly constructed castles we take refuse. The really sad thing about living in such a structure is when we include no windows for light to enter and we keep the draw up regardless of who come knocking. It is then our castle becomes but a prison.
Welcome to the DU, poet, you've made a grand entrance.
AT
Welcome to the DU, poet, you've made a grand entrance.
AT
19th Oct 2018 4:41pm
Thank you for your words! I'm realy glad that I found this place. And it is true what you said... All our constructions can easily become prisons. "We are all prisoniers off our own device"
Anonymous
19th Oct 2018 5:04pm
Your words are deep and beautiful. I look forward to read more of your brilliance.
19th Oct 2018 5:36pm
19th Oct 2018 5:54pm
Welcome Markis to the human experience - (and DUP).
I like the contrast in your poem between the 'solidity' of a castle and the ephemeral nature of dreams.
Josh.
I like the contrast in your poem between the 'solidity' of a castle and the ephemeral nature of dreams.
Josh.
19th Oct 2018 6:02pm
Thank you very much... Good to be here.
That is what I was trying to say, that sometime we put to much faith in our dreams and we rely to much on the fact that they wont shatter in million little pieces and we try to hide in the fortress of our hopes. ( I don't know if that makes sense)
That is what I was trying to say, that sometime we put to much faith in our dreams and we rely to much on the fact that they wont shatter in million little pieces and we try to hide in the fortress of our hopes. ( I don't know if that makes sense)
19th Oct 2018 6:07pm
It makes sense - humans have a huge capacity to keep believing in their dreams even with evidence mounting up against it - and hope (which is passive, in contrast to faith which is more active) keeps us going.
I guess this is the background to the English saying "Hope springs eternal" that my mother always used to quote to me.
I guess this is the background to the English saying "Hope springs eternal" that my mother always used to quote to me.
