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THE WHITE WATER WITCH
First a ripple
Then things swirl
Don't go under
Chase the proper lines
She's rapid she's wet
She's all over you
So soon
You've gone through her
Alive
Refreshed
Now how much of her
Got in you?
Then things swirl
Don't go under
Chase the proper lines
She's rapid she's wet
She's all over you
So soon
You've gone through her
Alive
Refreshed
Now how much of her
Got in you?
Published 18th Oct 2018
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18th Oct 2018 9:57pm
18th Oct 2018 10:03pm
Thank you. I was worried that these lines...
She's rapid she's wet
She's all over you
Would just come off as typical porn writing (which I seem to be doing a lot of lately) but their immediacy went with the theme. How did that part feel to you?
She's rapid she's wet
She's all over you
Would just come off as typical porn writing (which I seem to be doing a lot of lately) but their immediacy went with the theme. How did that part feel to you?
18th Oct 2018 10:12pm
It felt like a good fit to the imagery of white water, but with a twist towards the visceral reality of the female anatomy.
18th Oct 2018 10:17pm
19th Oct 2018 7:12pm
19th Oct 2018 7:14pm
