Caring is killing

Wow!! This is some strong stuff here!! You paint a portrait with your words. Absolutely fantastic. Actually I’m reading through your stuff and haven’t seen one I don’t like. You definitely have a fan here!

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it, and thanks for reading my other stuff. I don't think what I write generally appeals to masses so i really appreciate comment.

it is deep! my interpretation. it may be wrong . the serpent is the cruel controller and you are the victim.. someone who is stuck in darkness moving slowly into light maybe..the ending made me think this , i especially like the ending to this one

'' in the hole of a life with no exit '' this sounds like someone stuck in darkness with absolutely no escape and the person who is trying to show they care is actually not a caring person at all... they are near you you can't get rid of them ... this fills you with fear because you can sense by their look that they are actually evil.. maybe im wrong ..

i like these lines here

Crafting a serpent from brittle bone like fingers ...
interesting because how did he/she craft a serpent from brittle fingers .. it just makes me think of the opposite, making something even tho how is it made with brittle fingers..

this is kind of intriguing in a way and it does make me think .. i like how you make me want to delve into the menaing behind this ..

Hey Daffodil, your pretty much correct it's about someone trying to take control of a person's life by basicly putting them into a hole with no escape. the serpent from brittle fingers is more of a visual of an evil being that can control everything from situations people, everything around them and how they appear to other people so like this person uses fear so they make them appear fearful and evil kinda like you said. The ending I wrote so it could have two meanings really as you said moving into the light or just so he could be disintegrated and it would all be over.

I'm glad you liked it especially the ending because I wasn't sure about that part.

That last line did it for me:

“Dreaming of descending into the sun”

Lyrical with a powerful metaphor. I like how you walk us through the complexities of caring when you think you shouldn’t

I really enjoyed writing this one, I always felt writing is a great way to deal with anger and frustration in life.

I'm glad you enjoyed reading it and I really like your analysis of it. As always thanks for your feedback.