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Inception And Culmination (A Collaboration with SourMelon0313)
As silence leaks from these ceilings
And pools right by my ear
I hear my voiceless reason
Converse with itself
Conflicting stances of passion and
Interesting takes on morality
Voiceless voices inside mind
they question & answer
debate & suggest
What shall this seed grow to be...
a solid Tree of Wisdom
or simple grass-field of ideas?
This ensemble of cognition
From my past to another tomorrow
Quarreling amongst themselves
Forming various levels of persuasion
Bribing my innocent naivety
While challenging my thoughtful contemplation
Shall this assembly come to a conclusion...
a mental introspection in chaos
as time's waves whirl
a mindful eye will open
The naive child that once was
will escape their baffling war
then time shall cure
wide-eyed blurs
This abstract theatre of battle
Slowly creeping to a resolution
A compromise of skepticism
And profound obedience
Signing their signatures
On my worn synapses
Cerebration in process
when in active operations of mind
an ever-growing forest it is...
Till day the source
cuts off new growth
And pools right by my ear
I hear my voiceless reason
Converse with itself
Conflicting stances of passion and
Interesting takes on morality
Voiceless voices inside mind
they question & answer
debate & suggest
What shall this seed grow to be...
a solid Tree of Wisdom
or simple grass-field of ideas?
This ensemble of cognition
From my past to another tomorrow
Quarreling amongst themselves
Forming various levels of persuasion
Bribing my innocent naivety
While challenging my thoughtful contemplation
Shall this assembly come to a conclusion...
a mental introspection in chaos
as time's waves whirl
a mindful eye will open
The naive child that once was
will escape their baffling war
then time shall cure
wide-eyed blurs
This abstract theatre of battle
Slowly creeping to a resolution
A compromise of skepticism
And profound obedience
Signing their signatures
On my worn synapses
Cerebration in process
when in active operations of mind
an ever-growing forest it is...
Till day the source
cuts off new growth
Published 7th Apr 2018
| Edited 27th Apr 2018
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Ah , yes through the forest of neural branches we journey ,
A way , away , a way through the morass of mental dilemma
To a resolution of one plus one equals three...;)
Nicely done , both of you...
I can see the unique qualities of you both , yet the combination
works well , and SourMelon's words and phrasing have a softness
to them , and more a questioning feeling , whereas your stanzas ,
Elrond , feel more like definitive statement...good combo , and
nicely accomplished !
A way , away , a way through the morass of mental dilemma
To a resolution of one plus one equals three...;)
Nicely done , both of you...
I can see the unique qualities of you both , yet the combination
works well , and SourMelon's words and phrasing have a softness
to them , and more a questioning feeling , whereas your stanzas ,
Elrond , feel more like definitive statement...good combo , and
nicely accomplished !
8th Apr 2018 00:26am
Thank you,
I am curious to know,
which stanza specifically is mine and his?
whose is the Italicized one?
I am curious to know,
which stanza specifically is mine and his?
whose is the Italicized one?
8th Apr 2018 00:42am
Perhaps I am seriously mistaken , and Elrond is
writing in a different mode , yet I would posit
yours is the italicized one...
Having read more of Elrond's work , and seen his style ,
I would be most intrigued if it were the reverse...
Yet , I am always ready to be surprised and proven wrong...
Will you tell me ?
writing in a different mode , yet I would posit
yours is the italicized one...
Having read more of Elrond's work , and seen his style ,
I would be most intrigued if it were the reverse...
Yet , I am always ready to be surprised and proven wrong...
Will you tell me ?
8th Apr 2018 3:31am
hmmm ...
I see...
I'll leave it up to Elrond to answer that lol
Thank you for your kind regards! :)
Love,
H
I see...
I'll leave it up to Elrond to answer that lol
Thank you for your kind regards! :)
Love,
H
8th Apr 2018 12:19pm
A piece of me wants to leave it a mystery Now haha
Though , You were right with your first reflection Wolf . Interesting that you made those comments, as sourmelon and I were discussing the outcome similarily while we finished writing .
We'll have to keep that potential tone reversal in mind though for a future collab ! Haha
Thanks again friend .
Though , You were right with your first reflection Wolf . Interesting that you made those comments, as sourmelon and I were discussing the outcome similarily while we finished writing .
We'll have to keep that potential tone reversal in mind though for a future collab ! Haha
Thanks again friend .
8th Apr 2018 2:41am
8th Apr 2018 4:20am
It was a joy, and a wonderful experience collaborating with you,
Elrond! :)
I especially enjoyed how it all seem to settle well..
and how you agreed to my whims of ideas!
Thank you!!
Much love & respects
H
Elrond! :)
I especially enjoyed how it all seem to settle well..
and how you agreed to my whims of ideas!
Thank you!!
Much love & respects
H
8th Apr 2018 12:25pm
Likewise H ! :) It was certainly the most fun I've had writing in a while . I'm really happy with how things went through the process and what came of it .
We'll have to write again soon Zodiac buddy!
Much love indeed :)
-El
We'll have to write again soon Zodiac buddy!
Much love indeed :)
-El
