Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
14th Oct 2011 1:48pm
I like the message behind the words here. "Say what you mean." As a suggestion, you could use the title as the first line. I have seen ti done by popular poets and I have done it myself. I do think you may need more here though. You know, the old show don't tell adage...not much imagery here. Just sayin'
14th Oct 2011 5:35pm
