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Never Ending Loop
Never Ending Loop
I fell into the same trap again
Into a loop that never ends
Love, broken heart and repeat
Always falling for the same deceit
Scars from the past that I try to conceal
Passing of time has not been able to heal
Flashing lights peaking through dark
A dried up heart unable to spark
I always fall for the same kind every time
A never ending loop plays in my mind
I fell into the same trap again
Into a loop that never ends
Love, broken heart and repeat
Always falling for the same deceit
Scars from the past that I try to conceal
Passing of time has not been able to heal
Flashing lights peaking through dark
A dried up heart unable to spark
I always fall for the same kind every time
A never ending loop plays in my mind
Published 28th Mar 2018
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28th Mar 2018 9:08am
so sad how you are stuck in a loop, i like your use of the word loop .. because it says to me , you are unable to break free. maybe you need to work out a way to break the loop which you find yourself in .
despite there being an obvious sadness running throughout this ... i did enjoy reading , the pacing and rhythm to this is really nice and i love the rhyming scheme .
these are my favourite lines :-
''Flashing lights peaking through dark
A dried up heart unable to spark ''
so much sadness within that line... '' a dried up heart unable to spark '' you expressed this well
despite there being an obvious sadness running throughout this ... i did enjoy reading , the pacing and rhythm to this is really nice and i love the rhyming scheme .
these are my favourite lines :-
''Flashing lights peaking through dark
A dried up heart unable to spark ''
so much sadness within that line... '' a dried up heart unable to spark '' you expressed this well
28th Mar 2018 11:37am
