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What You do (for Me)
At our table with coffee or tea
With smiles between you and me
The conversation sets us free
The bonding is the key
And I feel the distant thunder
Fueled by pleasures’ plunder
Oncoming passionate wonder
Not stopped for any blunder
Catalyzing passions
With fuel too flammable to ration
That’s how it came to be
That you set me crazy-free
With smiles between you and me
The conversation sets us free
The bonding is the key
And I feel the distant thunder
Fueled by pleasures’ plunder
Oncoming passionate wonder
Not stopped for any blunder
Catalyzing passions
With fuel too flammable to ration
That’s how it came to be
That you set me crazy-free
Published 9th Jan 2018
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9th Jan 2018 4:42pm
I love the rhymes. 😀
Dates filled with mutual affection.
You think you were 'set crazy-free? '
I think you are crazy in love.
Beautiful write, this is.
Dates filled with mutual affection.
You think you were 'set crazy-free? '
I think you are crazy in love.
Beautiful write, this is.
25th Feb 2018 5:11pm
I felt the rhyming was a bit random or forced, in some places. I like the rhyme scheme and meter.
25th Feb 2018 6:13pm
Yes, that is a fair review that I can totally get behind. It's a poetry lesson, for me. And a fun one, too!
Thanks so much!!
Thanks so much!!
Anonymous
11th Aug 2018 10:08pm
This was greatly felt...
The rhymes IMO were awesome
Always Autumn
The rhymes IMO were awesome
Always Autumn
12th Aug 2018 00:02am
26th Aug 2018 2:50am
What blunder could possibly plunder your love? Too much milk in the tea maybe? ;-)
26th Aug 2018 3:13am
Funny! Many, many things...
Given the chance I'll blunder here and there. :)
Given the chance I'll blunder here and there. :)
