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She is
She's been buried in the rubble
lost her way and couldnt bear the trouble
of helping everyone else
and loving herself
she couldnt find her way back
to humanity
and it was all too far away
serenity
she needed a break
to get away
but her wings were too weak to lift her weight
so she took the time
to mend her breaks
and decide her path
she comes back stronger
and ready to face
any upcoming danger
she is strong
she is ready
she is renewed
she is in all of us.
lost her way and couldnt bear the trouble
of helping everyone else
and loving herself
she couldnt find her way back
to humanity
and it was all too far away
serenity
she needed a break
to get away
but her wings were too weak to lift her weight
so she took the time
to mend her breaks
and decide her path
she comes back stronger
and ready to face
any upcoming danger
she is strong
she is ready
she is renewed
she is in all of us.
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Re. She is
21st Dec 2017 5:19pm
Hey guys! I know I haven't posted in a while and I'm sorry about that... please let me know your thoughts on this poem.
Re. She is
21st Dec 2017 6:16pm
Great read, I know we all need time to take a break by ourselves.
Then we collect our thoughts and come back much stronger.
Then we collect our thoughts and come back much stronger.
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Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:21pm
Re. She is
21st Dec 2017 6:34pm
Very pleased and relieved to see your ink again.
Powerful inner strength showing through your words here.
Clarity of thought and determination abundant.
You used the break well.
Congrats on a well pinned piece.
Powerful inner strength showing through your words here.
Clarity of thought and determination abundant.
You used the break well.
Congrats on a well pinned piece.
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Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:22pm
Re. She is
21st Dec 2017 6:40pm
A very empowering and honest write Jess!
The best poems are about overcoming adversity,
especially when it attacks from within!
Critiquing this seems nitpicking. I like that it started out rhyming and was hoping it would continue all the way through, but the important thing is getting your feelings and thoughts to dance together in step, and hat you did very nicely!
JJ
The best poems are about overcoming adversity,
especially when it attacks from within!
Critiquing this seems nitpicking. I like that it started out rhyming and was hoping it would continue all the way through, but the important thing is getting your feelings and thoughts to dance together in step, and hat you did very nicely!
JJ
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Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:23pm
Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:23pm
Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:23pm
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22nd Dec 2017 8:25pm
Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 3:53am
I was captured by this line in particular 'she couldn't find her way back to humanity'
A poem like this is well fit for upbeat inspirational poems
Its feels good to have you back
Renewed
A poem like this is well fit for upbeat inspirational poems
Its feels good to have you back
Renewed
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Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:24pm
I feel honored that you guys missed me... I plan on staying for a while.
That is my personal favorite too. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the read.
That is my personal favorite too. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the read.
Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:25pm
I feel honored that you guys missed me... I plan on staying for a while.
That is my personal favorite too. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the read.
That is my personal favorite too. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the read.
Re: Re. She is
22nd Dec 2017 6:25pm
I feel honored that you guys missed me... I plan on staying for a while.
That is my personal favorite too. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the read.
That is my personal favorite too. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the read.
Re. She is
28th Dec 2017 12:15pm
definitely enjoyed this vibe.
everyone should take time for self rejuvenation...
yes..she is...ready for the world...
much respect
everyone should take time for self rejuvenation...
yes..she is...ready for the world...
much respect
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Re: Re. She is
5th Jan 2018 7:20pm
Re. She is
Anonymous
29th Jan 2018 3:41pm
It is important for the soul, if nothing else, to take step back and re-charge the mind. Enjoyed the write.
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Re: Re. She is
1st Feb 2018 2:15pm
Glad you enjoyed it! I completely agree with you. sometimes it takes sometime to fall into a rhythm. Just being comfortable I guess.
Re. She is
7th Feb 2018 6:59pm
Wonderful piece, Light. I appreciate the idea of taking the time necessary to heal, to become stronger. Too often we just move on from the pain with out binding the wound. Brava!
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