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Tremors In My Femurs
Faulty flagellations
find me
flinching
at shadows that be
Quite probably
I have failed
outgrowing
new wing insecurity
find me
flinching
at shadows that be
Quite probably
I have failed
outgrowing
new wing insecurity
Published 6th Dec 2017
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This latest work is very reflective of growth as a poet. You're truly honing your craft down to a perfected rythm.
The very few suggestions I have are bracketed words I feel you don't need.
Faulty flagellations
find me
flinching
at [ the ] shadows that be
Quite probably
I have failed
[ the ] outgrowing
[ of ] new wing insecurity
The very few suggestions I have are bracketed words I feel you don't need.
Faulty flagellations
find me
flinching
at [ the ] shadows that be
Quite probably
I have failed
[ the ] outgrowing
[ of ] new wing insecurity
6th Dec 2017 3:08pm
Oooh, thank you! I'll chop them :) I guess it just feels odd having things SO short when it is already, but you're 100% right.
6th Dec 2017 9:52pm
a truly inspiring write - my pen is scribbling already :-))))
Thanks for sharing :-)))))
Thanks for sharing :-)))))
6th Dec 2017 10:00pm
6th Dec 2017 10:25pm
Anonymous
10th Dec 2017 00:05am
AtoMik.. nicely done.. dig this.. much respect..
Dave
Dave
26th Dec 2017 6:07am
You address it and undress it at the same time. Very nice and subtle in an explicit sort of way. Great stuff!
26th Dec 2017 6:47am
