Even Overkill Went Overboard

I love your vocabulary, so well written.. think its safe to say you could consider me a fan!!

Thanks so much dude! I love throwing big words around when I can 😊

Maybe it was the approach

I don't understand...?

Unique to say the least

I'm not sure this is a positive, but thank you :)

It absolutely is positive

Cool! I figured as much :)

Sometimes people are snarky with the phrase "unique". It's like; "😒  Interesting..."

I agree

"callow cargo floats condemned" -this makes me think of the box they carried the Ark of the Covenant in from the movie Indiana Jones Raiders of the Lost Ark


"silhouettes scream & snap
Through slices of a shattered mirror " -i'm free falling that was so good.
breaking cameos in half and cutting skin with broken glass laying on the floor.bleeding from whats been brought.


i like how cold the last stanza is
"our iced abbreviations  
out to Arctic seas"

"A wintry refrain"- the snow,recurring, AtoMik winter if you will.

well penned ma'am

That's awesome!

Dirty mirror pieces that grimly reflect our grungy past, but the grime is an accurate layer on our consciences.

Thank you as always for the thoughtful feedback :)

damn it! wonderful as always (lol) read it three times out loud :-)))

"Flaky flotsam  
jaded jetsam  
callow cargo floats condemned" - my fav bit to read :-))) - this would make a good performance piece

Dude thank you! I really don't intend these subjective pieces as performance pieces usually, so that's particularly encouraging. I appreciate that man. Hope everything is well David *hug*

Another imagery gem.....rite up thee write on

Its all positive

This is outstanding, AtoMikOne.

Flaky flotsam  
jaded jetsam  
callow cargo floats condemned  

Wow.

Thank you mi'lady 😊