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Underwater
Pinstripe me
up & down
full fern vernal
French garden eyes
I'll toy with obstruction
though I suck at stacking blocks
I'll write off
those husky forearms
like they don't
like they don't...
do shit for me
Driving The Tank home
(a Volvo old as me)
thickset (rat-tat-tat) songs spewing
gooey
dewy fantasies
You'd be my buoy
you'd drink me swimming
you'd lift my lungs
from gravity
Published 29th Nov 2017
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29th Nov 2017 1:05am
29th Nov 2017 1:06am
Coming from you, that word and a half is one of the sweetest things I've ever read. I'm dead serious <3
29th Nov 2017 8:01pm
I like this a lot - it has a different vibe to anything I have read of yours so far - I just love the way you use words - could read it all day :-)
30th Nov 2017 1:47am
30th Nov 2017 1:52am
6th Dec 2017 6:58pm
"Pinstripe me
up & down
full fern vernal
French garden eyes"
Man... I love this... killer opening line!
up & down
full fern vernal
French garden eyes"
Man... I love this... killer opening line!
6th Dec 2017 9:58pm
10th Dec 2017 6:14pm
this felt a bit more lust than love. i like the mix of sensuality, wordplay, and scenic metaphors, "You'd be my buoy."
10th Dec 2017 6:27pm
In a sense, it probably is :) It's some impressions from dating my husband, so that seems accurate. At any rate, a less developed kind of love (naturally).
