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When in Absense of Sense
A trivia holds mind
Answers to these may seem trivial
Yet course of action to its response...
Shall be precise
A path of which direction to take;
dimmed
by shadows of low
in flames
fueled by jealousy
We are easily swayed from true worth-
with petty whispers
Sinful thoughts holds captive
Shamed into black hole of disgrace
Immersed into confusion
What is real and what isn't?
Emotions blinds the truth
Admiration leads to greed
Guardian angel guides us
To but a fool's paradise
We are all in the maze
Of dazzling illusions-
one can not escape without senses
nor with their senses intact
Infatuation...with most nonsensical sense
Trivia holds mind
Yet clueless of clues
Discombobulated..
Does the end of this jar, hold hope?
Fault of curiosity...opened sickness to humanity
Was it her fault?
Which lead to these viruses..
You could wish to live
in a rational mind
But the irrational takes throne
Because...
we're clueless
of the actual
the real
How would we perform with these?
Answers to these may seem trivial
Yet course of action to its response...
Shall be precise
A path of which direction to take;
dimmed
by shadows of low
in flames
fueled by jealousy
We are easily swayed from true worth-
with petty whispers
Sinful thoughts holds captive
Shamed into black hole of disgrace
Immersed into confusion
What is real and what isn't?
Emotions blinds the truth
Admiration leads to greed
Guardian angel guides us
To but a fool's paradise
We are all in the maze
Of dazzling illusions-
one can not escape without senses
nor with their senses intact
Infatuation...with most nonsensical sense
Trivia holds mind
Yet clueless of clues
Discombobulated..
Does the end of this jar, hold hope?
Fault of curiosity...opened sickness to humanity
Was it her fault?
Which lead to these viruses..
You could wish to live
in a rational mind
But the irrational takes throne
Because...
we're clueless
of the actual
the real
How would we perform with these?
Published 26th Nov 2017
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26th Nov 2017 11:55am
Feels a continuation. To the previous, but still very intense n meaningful...
26th Nov 2017 1:27pm
Thank you so much for your observant read!
I wasn't sure where this was going...but I tried to make this whole piece connect it itself...I guess it somehow led to connect the last piece..
Your support always appreciated,
Love
H
I wasn't sure where this was going...but I tried to make this whole piece connect it itself...I guess it somehow led to connect the last piece..
Your support always appreciated,
Love
H
26th Nov 2017 2:22pm
Oh my sweet you have such depth beyond your years. Love the questions and paths this poem leads.
26th Nov 2017 8:54pm
Thank you sweet poetess...! :)
I am yet to be credited with such grace of your words..
But I humbly accept your kindness..
Your support and love always appreciated,
Love
H
I am yet to be credited with such grace of your words..
But I humbly accept your kindness..
Your support and love always appreciated,
Love
H
26th Nov 2017 8:41pm
you win an award for using "Discombobulated" in your poem!...that is a killer 20 dollar word...I love how it makes your mouth feel when you say it...:)
"We are easily swayed from true worth-
with petty whispers
Sinful thoughts holds captive
Shamed into black hole of disgrace
Immersed into confusion
What is real and what isn't?
Emotions blinds the truth
Admiration leads to greed "
I like the social and eternal questions asked and answered throughout....much like Socrates teaching style....your wisdom continues to stream out and decorate your verse
love Jeff
"We are easily swayed from true worth-
with petty whispers
Sinful thoughts holds captive
Shamed into black hole of disgrace
Immersed into confusion
What is real and what isn't?
Emotions blinds the truth
Admiration leads to greed "
I like the social and eternal questions asked and answered throughout....much like Socrates teaching style....your wisdom continues to stream out and decorate your verse
love Jeff
Thank you dear Jeff..
I'm glad you enjoy the words in my works ..
I do my best in my works, and your support and acknowledgement provides the cushion..
I have yet to learn... you humble me
:)
Your time much appreciated,
Love
H
I'm glad you enjoy the words in my works ..
I do my best in my works, and your support and acknowledgement provides the cushion..
I have yet to learn... you humble me
:)
Your time much appreciated,
Love
H
28th Nov 2017 9:50am
an intense searching poem - many wise observations and leading questions - I enjoyed every word - this is real good :-))
"We are easily swayed from true worth-
with petty whispers" these two lines are awesome :-)))
"We are easily swayed from true worth-
with petty whispers" these two lines are awesome :-)))
28th Nov 2017 8:17pm
Thank you for such kind and encouraging feedback dear david!
I was afraid ideas were kinda all-over the place haha,
but I glad you enjoyed :)
Love
H
I was afraid ideas were kinda all-over the place haha,
but I glad you enjoyed :)
Love
H
