What if?

the trapping of this feeling is all consuming......it can only be cured by positive thinking.......the causation of your pain comes through nicely....and simply....constructed.

I agree with bibi above, I think you have simply meaningfull write here...  
 
In terms of honest critique, I think you could do so much more with it, keeping it short and sweet but giving it some language decor, Im not a fan of the use of nice to describe how he plays... and I think if you allaborate more on the following stanzas with the use of language.  
 
That all said, I think you have ousted yourself with this piece... You my dear are most certainly NOT the spawn of Satan...smile...

thank you, and, I'm not a big fan of making things fancy, if you read some of my other poems you could see that :), but I always like to hear other people's honest critique :)

Oh I have read all your other work, I would never comment with out research :)

I really like it so don`t take me the wrong way...

I would also never suggest that you make it fancy,
but surely we could do more with how he plays than nice?

Anyhow... Thanks for sharing anyway...was fun!

It's the simplicity of the words :D
No prb :)