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Unrequited Love (Haikus) 7.2
(i) Couple
never quite a couple
what's love gotta do with it
simply put, nothing
(ii) Not Music to My Ears
my singing hearts beats
My serenade is complete
my strings gently weep
(iii) Die
you ended what we were
I say we,but I mean me
I now want to die
(iv) Easy
loving you. easy
I never ever had you
losing you kills me
(v) Dissolved
the sun grows weary
love dissolves wind and rain
my moon sings the blues
(vi) One Step Forward
loving in freeze frame
like walking in molasses
I don't get that far
(vii) Mirrored
My love's rejection
it changes my connection
there's no protection
Published 17th Sep 2017
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Anonymous
17th Sep 2017 10:42pm
Dammit David...I wanted this in my reading list and it's full!! I can't even get into all ther easons why I love this so much...just know that I do and as soon as there is a slot, I'm stealing it!!!
Warm fuzzies sent your way
Xoxo Taryn
Warm fuzzies sent your way
Xoxo Taryn
19th Sep 2017 1:50am
17th Sep 2017 10:43pm
David I feel your pain
deep in my heart
your cuts are mine
while reading this
my heart aches..
love & hugs Brena
deep in my heart
your cuts are mine
while reading this
my heart aches..
love & hugs Brena
19th Sep 2017 1:54am
Anonymous
18th Sep 2017 4:07pm
You're killing me with these unrequited love pieces. My squishy heart keeps breaking into little pieces. It saddens me to realize that some of our best writing comes from our experiences, our reality. Lots and lots of teary hugs for you!
19th Sep 2017 1:55am
I agree - there is always an element of truth in everything I write :-( huge big bear hugs will make it alright :-)
18th Sep 2017 4:12pm
O..so cruel, the hurt of a heart-felt love un-reciprocated! Undoubtedly, for so many, this pain, and frustration aches deeply!
David...i enjoy the honest, emotional expressions of your individual Haiku, and how effectively each stands on its own! And, i am becoming very fond of your creative technique that enables the separate pieces to flow, one into the next---subtly carrying the over-all theme to conclusion. In fact, my friend.......
Your unique skill ,at creating these particular-themed Haiku, is actually developing into exceptional Senryu...as not only this posting, but your previous one, " Unrequieted Love (Haiku) 7.0 ". clearly demonstrate!
Anyhow...a very well-done to you, poet !!
Slainte!!!
David...i enjoy the honest, emotional expressions of your individual Haiku, and how effectively each stands on its own! And, i am becoming very fond of your creative technique that enables the separate pieces to flow, one into the next---subtly carrying the over-all theme to conclusion. In fact, my friend.......
Your unique skill ,at creating these particular-themed Haiku, is actually developing into exceptional Senryu...as not only this posting, but your previous one, " Unrequieted Love (Haiku) 7.0 ". clearly demonstrate!
Anyhow...a very well-done to you, poet !!
Slainte!!!
19th Sep 2017 2:19am
thank you so much I am so glad that you are my friend :-) friends always :-) Big Huge hugs :-)
19th Sep 2017 2:09pm
