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one life
all we get is one life,one chance,one time to say
the things that we need to all in one day
is that enough,you think you can do what you want?
you think your tough,you think you lived live you cunt?
you dont know pain,you don't know what its like to lose
someone you love in front of your eyes and then choose
to go on,to live in this world full of strife
you haven't been through pain,so enjoy your one life.....
the things that we need to all in one day
is that enough,you think you can do what you want?
you think your tough,you think you lived live you cunt?
you dont know pain,you don't know what its like to lose
someone you love in front of your eyes and then choose
to go on,to live in this world full of strife
you haven't been through pain,so enjoy your one life.....
Published 23rd Aug 2011
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Anonymous
23rd Aug 2011 4:03am
This is at best an anger poem...it starts out meaningful and somewhat insightful...then drags on and turns into something full of hate and is imbued with derogatory words that seem misplaced and utterly detract from the overall charm that could have been with this piece...I don't like the last line...its a bit too assuming in my opinion...we all have pain, just in different degrees...to say that would be sardonic...but then again...the whole piece hinges on that kind of closure...totally apathetic, rather than empathetic...
