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woman [the sociological aspects of pornography and a book cover for tenderness locked within]
i can live
on her essence
without taking a breath
a lonely prisoner
locked away for winter's entirety
still i feel the seasons of summer
spring and fall
in the mercy of her lips
my woman
siren and muse
my sweet friend and sister
she's the one who ignites the silver flame
that dances within the confines of this cage
brother give me your daughter
i want her washed up
on desert island shores doused in coconut oil
i'll invite myself over for pizza and a movie
and steal her hand
with the mona lisa under my arm
we will stroll the streets of paris like thieves
she sends me gifts
poetry and books and her wonderful eye
for composure
whilst i pour over photographs of sex
but what she sculpts with her mind
remains untouchable
she offers me
dust particles for life
still i want more
desire
it's only natural she tells me
when she bows down to the sun
and for all this
i surrender my sanity
my heart
my body and age-erasing jizz
the drippings of life
that sings a melody of laughter
to the fading rhythm of love
i pray
for her smile and presence alone
to torch
the greed that now faces this world
when i close my eyes and slip under the waves
of ultraviolet light
Published 31st Mar 2017
| Edited 5th Apr 2017
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31st Mar 2017 4:29pm
31st Mar 2017 8:00pm
This is not a critique, i just wanted to express how captivating this poem is to me...It's truly very captivating, i wish i could read it from several different perspectives.
I was so stoked when I read your comment. You said captivating twice, that's awesome feedback. Thank you.
31st Mar 2017 10:18pm
Reading love poems naked is one hell of an experience and one hell of a compliment that I took you there with my uninhibited poetry.
Thank you, brother. Your feeback is a poetic blessing and the RL add is the virgin Mary's cherry.
Thank you, brother. Your feeback is a poetic blessing and the RL add is the virgin Mary's cherry.
1st Apr 2017 00:09am
No, you put your voice to it! :P
FYI (I dislike using that acronym) I'm working on a spoken word video for something epic that's not yet published. Insider information for ya... and thanks for the RL add.
FYI (I dislike using that acronym) I'm working on a spoken word video for something epic that's not yet published. Insider information for ya... and thanks for the RL add.
16th Apr 2017 5:57am
1st Apr 2017 2:55am
This is amazingly well written both in form and deeper meaning, I would call it exquisite....
Deep and exquisite? Thanks heaps PR for your high praise and RL add. I appreciate you stopping by to read my stuff
1st Apr 2017 7:53am
maraud the Paris streets to find the beauty of the sinister;
let the porn be deciphered by love...
let the porn be deciphered by love...
15th Apr 2017 9:50pm
Who doesn't want to maraud the streets in the city of love? Thanks for dropping in and leaving your thoughts, Mr Feddeler.
1st Apr 2017 11:43am
I read this yesterday and had to allow the impact to settle. It's almost as though whoever dubbed you with that title, held up a mirror and lit a fire that you could see yourself in a different light, which shines through in this pen.
Soul-written it is. With a side of heart-on-your-sleeve.
Soul-written it is. With a side of heart-on-your-sleeve.
15th Apr 2017 9:53pm
Waiting for the impact to settle is a good sign. Soul written... thank you and I can confirm that writing this poem certainly felt that way. Thanks heaps for your great comment, Ahavati.
2nd Apr 2017 1:16am
Desire and surrender is always such a volatile mixture - this poem is so beautifully written and packs a punch :-)
Big Like :-)
Big Like :-)
Hmm, desire and surrender is like lighting a match in fireworks factory to find your way in the dark... I'm waiting for the big bang!
Thanks heaps, Mr Macleod.
Thanks heaps, Mr Macleod.
I dunn bother about how crowded the reading listers' queued up here n how much you already occupy in my space, Mr. hardcore poet :) this wud still go to my RL juz not for the overall perfection you paint in the flow of images so subtle n speaking damn effective..but a lighting up last stanza , esp. its opening..I pray for her smile n presence alone...,n its ending -when i close my eyes and slip under the waves
of ultraviolet light..pray n ultraviolet..these frequencies vibe at higher levels ..of purity Case..#juz me. n i juz want to go with that some overwhelming heaviness frm here .w/o dissecting any further.
shines a rarity gem in simplistic execution n carefully breathing spaces u give them. well go on more n more!
of ultraviolet light..pray n ultraviolet..these frequencies vibe at higher levels ..of purity Case..#juz me. n i juz want to go with that some overwhelming heaviness frm here .w/o dissecting any further.
shines a rarity gem in simplistic execution n carefully breathing spaces u give them. well go on more n more!
The reading list junkies have left me feeling blown away and kinda embarrassed at the same time. Uma, you honour me with such high praise, but sometimes these poems are influenced so heavily by the muse, that the poet kinda feels like an imposter when the poem flows so freely and couldn't scribe the poetry quick enough before the feeling subsides.
Thanks heaps for sharing your thoughts and for contributing to the shockingly long reading list line up.
Thanks heaps for sharing your thoughts and for contributing to the shockingly long reading list line up.
4th Apr 2017 4:36am
15th Apr 2017 10:21pm
Thanks for your feeback. I agree, the title is rather long and after reading your comment I revised the title so it's slightly longer, but hopefully connects more with the subject of the poem.
Mo Chara..
.as with so many pieces, interpretation tends to be personal....from a bit more subjective view-point,...And I feel that this poem is layered with levels for the reader to explore.With this being said, to me it feels that, within this poem, an underlying current flows ...... from initial desire and seduction.....to arousal and submission. But...O what a powerful impact the the merging of these emotional currents creates!
And , with this one, the rougher sides of your usual raw, are somewhat tempered with tenderness---at least in your first two stanzas.....so stirring....heart-touching .
Alexander.....you have allowed us a glimpse of your somewhat, (secreted), 'softer' side...... but i must say it is
pleasurable--indeed !
Thanks for sharing!
.as with so many pieces, interpretation tends to be personal....from a bit more subjective view-point,...And I feel that this poem is layered with levels for the reader to explore.With this being said, to me it feels that, within this poem, an underlying current flows ...... from initial desire and seduction.....to arousal and submission. But...O what a powerful impact the the merging of these emotional currents creates!
And , with this one, the rougher sides of your usual raw, are somewhat tempered with tenderness---at least in your first two stanzas.....so stirring....heart-touching .
Alexander.....you have allowed us a glimpse of your somewhat, (secreted), 'softer' side...... but i must say it is
pleasurable--indeed !
Thanks for sharing!
'An underlining current flows', pretty much describes the course this poem took in its conception... the poetry and emotions came careering like a train. 'Tempered with tenderness', I think that describes this is poem perfectly.
Thanks heaps for your awesome comment, Enchantress. Your razor sharp observations and stimulating thoughts are always greatly appreciated.
Thanks heaps for your awesome comment, Enchantress. Your razor sharp observations and stimulating thoughts are always greatly appreciated.
5th Sep 2017 11:35am
