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An Ode To Algolagnia
Nowhere did he touch her
more
than the middle of her mind
He tortured her with
choices
humiliations of every kind
a limitless pool to draw
from
looks and smells and loosing control
he'd offer her stained
clothing
things too big or things too small
a one cup bra and loose
panties
or no underwear at all
his gift to her was
freedom
to choose her personal disgrace
she’d sob and pick the lessor
evil
that keeps her in her place
and through it all she loves
him
plucking from a plethora of choices
more
than the middle of her mind
He tortured her with
choices
humiliations of every kind
a limitless pool to draw
from
looks and smells and loosing control
he'd offer her stained
clothing
things too big or things too small
a one cup bra and loose
panties
or no underwear at all
his gift to her was
freedom
to choose her personal disgrace
she’d sob and pick the lessor
evil
that keeps her in her place
and through it all she loves
him
plucking from a plethora of choices
Published 2nd Feb 2017
| Edited 25th May 2017
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10th Feb 2017 2:23pm
Wow, I really love this. The structure is very effective. I don't know if you intended it, or perhaps did it subconsciously but each part is written like a choice I.E one line, one word, one line such as:
go to sleep
or
write a poem
And that is great.
The only thing I wasn't sure of was the very last line because it didn't feel like a strong line and also ''wealth of choices'' doesn't sound very restrictive.
Thank-you for sharing this! X
go to sleep
or
write a poem
And that is great.
The only thing I wasn't sure of was the very last line because it didn't feel like a strong line and also ''wealth of choices'' doesn't sound very restrictive.
Thank-you for sharing this! X
10th Feb 2017 5:08pm
You are most welcome Stephanie. And thank you for your wonderful insights and suggestions. Your feedback is exactly what I'm looking for.
Wow!! I could almost picture this man in my mind...his voice, the tone he uses when he tortures her, his posture and demeanor. I find him to be a distinguished gentleman-like appearance, very attractive, with a smooth, strict low-toned voice...torturing her with mere one-line questions or sentences that make her tremble to answer or scramble to respond as she had to make a choice to what he was offering her.
Psychological games ARE torture!! Damned if you do; damned if you don't.
Excellent piece here, my friend!! I love it!!
Psychological games ARE torture!! Damned if you do; damned if you don't.
Excellent piece here, my friend!! I love it!!
Glad you're enjoying the ignominious play Cindi. I like your take on it. And your smile.
