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A love reply
I can't let go of this life that I've built
My family comes first
Can't bear the burden of guilt
My head and my heart do not agree
This is the conflict, why can't you see?
I do overthink
but my thoughts keep me safe
I can't up and run
so I'm stuck in this place
Sensing my pain
still you wish to feed
But two negative energies
is not what we need
I've thought about telling you
the secrets that I hold
but my head warns me
One day you'll grow cold
All that would be left
is a broken up home
Everything thrown away
then you're free to roam
So staying in my safe place
weep away I must
Because of my gut
In you I don't trust
So I'll stay without love
Because all of the above...
My family comes first
Can't bear the burden of guilt
My head and my heart do not agree
This is the conflict, why can't you see?
I do overthink
but my thoughts keep me safe
I can't up and run
so I'm stuck in this place
Sensing my pain
still you wish to feed
But two negative energies
is not what we need
I've thought about telling you
the secrets that I hold
but my head warns me
One day you'll grow cold
All that would be left
is a broken up home
Everything thrown away
then you're free to roam
So staying in my safe place
weep away I must
Because of my gut
In you I don't trust
So I'll stay without love
Because all of the above...
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Re. A love reply
7th Jan 2017 2:08pm
oh wow, this was rather sad, and i can relate to very much. What i really enjoyed was the flow and the ending was just perfect. You are a wonderful writer ^^
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7th Jan 2017 2:40pm
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7th Jan 2017 2:09pm
when the stakes are too high
better land, than sky
a tree full of fruit
is stuck with deep roots
it's a world of it's own
with shelter for birds
provides always shade
regardless of hurts!
selfless, sacrificial, in touch with (hard) reality! one word-WISE!
better land, than sky
a tree full of fruit
is stuck with deep roots
it's a world of it's own
with shelter for birds
provides always shade
regardless of hurts!
selfless, sacrificial, in touch with (hard) reality! one word-WISE!
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7th Jan 2017 2:47pm
Thanks KDAmB for your brilliant comment, such wise words! Much appreciated!
It's nice to have reassurance especially in times of weakness or temptation 💜
It's nice to have reassurance especially in times of weakness or temptation 💜
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7th Jan 2017 3:22pm
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7th Jan 2017 3:30pm
Re. A love reply
7th Jan 2017 4:35pm
The conflict between head and heart... I know it so well!
In the end... always stick with your instinct, though it's not the easiest choice...
Such a strong write, you are very talented!
In the end... always stick with your instinct, though it's not the easiest choice...
Such a strong write, you are very talented!
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7th Jan 2017 4:40pm
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7th Jan 2017 6:05pm
Fucking wow Wat a powerful write. I feel this so much amazing how u have transitioned this to words
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A huge thanks Cheesa! Glad you felt it thanks for the comment and thanks for adding it to your reading list!
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8th Jan 2017 9:50am
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7th Jan 2017 7:21pm
So sad, I bet you have so much to give. Overthinking is my problem too. I relate. A very emotional write hit me straight in the heart. I just wish I could help. I want yu to stay around and share yur beautiful poeyry. My poetry is my therapy. it keeps me going and safe from climbing the walls. you have a great talent for expression. keep on what your doing. i wish you well with all my heart. I care. moog.
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7th Jan 2017 7:32pm
Bless you Moog! I love that it touched you and I plan to stick around. Yes I think it helps me too... sometimes I'm unaware of how I feel until it pours from me in ink and I don't consider myself a writer so when I get great comments I really cherish them but I do have experiences and a lot of emotion so I just write it down.
Much love
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Much love
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Anonymous
7th Jan 2017 7:42pm
Wise words, well expressed.
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7th Jan 2017 7:43pm
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13th Jan 2017 1:27am
So sad. But, what beautiful art, sadness makes.
And...Annnnd!!! This rhyme scheme!! I'm so in love with it!
Marvelous work, my friend!!
And...Annnnd!!! This rhyme scheme!! I'm so in love with it!
Marvelous work, my friend!!
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13th Jan 2017 10:29am
Thanks CW for your very kind comment! Thrilled you loved the ryhming scheme, it means so much coming from you! :D
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13th Jan 2017 2:22pm
'I do overthink
but my thoughts keep me safe'
I can so relate to this.. what marvellous pace and rhythm, full of true values, loving this work :)
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but my thoughts keep me safe'
I can so relate to this.. what marvellous pace and rhythm, full of true values, loving this work :)
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13th Jan 2017 4:52pm
Glad im not alone I used to think I was crazy before finding this site and realised there were people out their in similar situations with similar feelings ;) lol. Thanks for the great comment NT!
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