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tied up
Drifting oceans collide
tides up rise
so we collide
in bed your warmth reminds me of summer nights
skin and tights
be my water queen babe
i say poor the water in the motherfucking water
i missed the sea but not the salt
i used you for sex and pleasure
as you used me for dollar bills and cashmere
how'd i hide you ask?
deep under your tide
roars orgasm;as i mumble
organisms collide as buddies
bud heads
tides up rise
so we collide
in bed your warmth reminds me of summer nights
skin and tights
be my water queen babe
i say poor the water in the motherfucking water
i missed the sea but not the salt
i used you for sex and pleasure
as you used me for dollar bills and cashmere
how'd i hide you ask?
deep under your tide
roars orgasm;as i mumble
organisms collide as buddies
bud heads
Published 18th Dec 2016
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18th Dec 2016 8:57pm
I don't manage to follow the visual or mental images you string here, from oceans colliding (isn't water capable of a different metaphor? or did you want the water feel solid?), to motherfucker and cashmere. Hmmm.
18th Dec 2016 9:51pm
What i am attempting to visualize is a female taking advantage of a man and believing shes mentally more capable and thinking she can use him for his money and attempts to get close to him for money but the male is aware of this and still continues using her for sexual pleasures. Think of water as a solid body;motherfucker as an expression and cashmere as an example. I apologize if i confused you but its all about perspective and how you comprehend things.
18th Dec 2016 11:23pm
18th Dec 2016 11:39pm
