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Tattoo my breast with stars
The full moon is still beautiful when cold bites at
my cheeks. It cares not, it sees not, it hears not the
lonely sigh of a passing train. But it finds me in the
dark and illuminates my despondent reverie.
The thoughts of a broken woman were not
meant to be seen, only kept.
When the night is young and sleep is clever prey,
my dreams are merely a wasteland where beauty
goes to die. I am no hunter and the moon was
not meant to shine in such places. The waste
of my tears, stripping away the luster of elegance
that is natural on a woman.
I come from a dangerous place, a place where the
sun is cool and distant, and the ghost image is a burden
to my swollen eyes. My heart is used, but unlike
my purse, it is never empty. If I sold it for chips of gold
I might survive another day. What is the price of heartache?
Ascendant is a man who claims what others could not.
I've bedded monsters, challenged my fate, and
wandered alone to cradle my pain. I am born
of wickedness and I crave the heat of those rough hands
and ferine teeth you so rudely force upon my flesh.
Only a savage can capture my heart; if you can take it,
It's yours.
my cheeks. It cares not, it sees not, it hears not the
lonely sigh of a passing train. But it finds me in the
dark and illuminates my despondent reverie.
The thoughts of a broken woman were not
meant to be seen, only kept.
When the night is young and sleep is clever prey,
my dreams are merely a wasteland where beauty
goes to die. I am no hunter and the moon was
not meant to shine in such places. The waste
of my tears, stripping away the luster of elegance
that is natural on a woman.
I come from a dangerous place, a place where the
sun is cool and distant, and the ghost image is a burden
to my swollen eyes. My heart is used, but unlike
my purse, it is never empty. If I sold it for chips of gold
I might survive another day. What is the price of heartache?
Ascendant is a man who claims what others could not.
I've bedded monsters, challenged my fate, and
wandered alone to cradle my pain. I am born
of wickedness and I crave the heat of those rough hands
and ferine teeth you so rudely force upon my flesh.
Only a savage can capture my heart; if you can take it,
It's yours.
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Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 9:11am
counting the stars on your breast
& the ways of savage love, Kas.
rough & ferine are also forms of beauty...
& the ways of savage love, Kas.
rough & ferine are also forms of beauty...
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 9:37am
Yes, John, so much passion lies within each of those stars and an intensity born of savage beauty.
Thank you for seeing my words and for such an amazing comment, just wouldn't be the same without you...
Thank you for seeing my words and for such an amazing comment, just wouldn't be the same without you...
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 10:17am
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16th Dec 2016 7:56pm
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16th Dec 2016 11:32am
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 7:58pm
Your comments leave me smiling, thanks
so much for the lovely words, Orangeade...
so much for the lovely words, Orangeade...
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 12:42pm
Love can be so very painful in it's passing... yet you challenge flesh eating demons to conquer your vulnerable heart. The vividity of imagery within the lines of your verse shines a light of hope across this universe of dreams and inspired me to align the stars into a poetic refrain...
Thanks for such a beautifully bittersweet ballad!
JJ
"Hope is Darkest Just Before Dawn"
A wolf cloaked beneath a robbed hood calls out a breathtaking warning
Howling up at the full moon unleashed on his ravenous path
Towards the lonely North Star teasing his white ferine teeth
Daring him to take a cold carnal bite of sparkling starlight
Thirsting for celestial nectar that spills from the overturned dipper
His streaking comet arises above her horizon leaving a trail of stardust
His return anticipated after his full circle journey carries him lustily home
Though his glowing visit is brief his hot tail enlightens her long starry night
Until by sunrise she mourns his passing under a cloak of blinding insight
Thanks for such a beautifully bittersweet ballad!
JJ
"Hope is Darkest Just Before Dawn"
A wolf cloaked beneath a robbed hood calls out a breathtaking warning
Howling up at the full moon unleashed on his ravenous path
Towards the lonely North Star teasing his white ferine teeth
Daring him to take a cold carnal bite of sparkling starlight
Thirsting for celestial nectar that spills from the overturned dipper
His streaking comet arises above her horizon leaving a trail of stardust
His return anticipated after his full circle journey carries him lustily home
Though his glowing visit is brief his hot tail enlightens her long starry night
Until by sunrise she mourns his passing under a cloak of blinding insight
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 8:06pm
I agree, love can be painful, but those strong enough to claim it are greatly rewarded. And what an amazing comment, just one of the many things to enjoy here on DU, that wonderful effect we all have on eachother, inspiring so many others to write such beautiful things.
Thanks so much for sharing those inspired lines, you've done such a wonderful job of realigning the stars...
Thanks so much for sharing those inspired lines, you've done such a wonderful job of realigning the stars...
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 2:02pm
"Only a savage can capture my heart; if you can take it, It's yours" > amazing lines!
Painful but very profound writing... I really like this one!
"What is the price of heartache?" Good question, makes me wonder...
Painful but very profound writing... I really like this one!
"What is the price of heartache?" Good question, makes me wonder...
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 8:12pm
Thank you, kind lady, for another lovely comment, I really appreciate those.
And yes, heartache is a painful thing, but we always seem willing to pay the cost, even when we don't know the price.
Hm, pehaps some of us are still in debt?...
And yes, heartache is a painful thing, but we always seem willing to pay the cost, even when we don't know the price.
Hm, pehaps some of us are still in debt?...
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Anonymous
16th Dec 2016 2:22pm
I absolutely love this vulnerable write. The pain, heartbreak, scars and emotion- seen so beautifully.
The ending, closes it perfectly.
Brilliant ink 💓
The ending, closes it perfectly.
Brilliant ink 💓

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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 8:15pm
Thank you, WTH, it's nice to see you visit and I truly appreciate the wonderful comment...
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16th Dec 2016 4:34pm
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 8:18pm
Thanks so much, I'm glad you felt the meaning and I appreciate the read as well...
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 6:41pm
There's some wondrous imagery in this, Kas.
My heart is used, but unlike
my purse, it is never empty.
That literally took my breath away.
It's a beautiful write filled with the magnetic pull that captures experience in all of us. Something so relatable we remember something in our hearts that our mind may have forgotten.
My heart is used, but unlike
my purse, it is never empty.
That literally took my breath away.
It's a beautiful write filled with the magnetic pull that captures experience in all of us. Something so relatable we remember something in our hearts that our mind may have forgotten.
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 8:22pm
Thanks, Ahavati, love seeing your insightful words, always grasping that deeper meaning.
I'm sure all of us have felt it at some point and I agree, while our minds forget, our hearts always seem to remember.
Such a wonderful comment...
I'm sure all of us have felt it at some point and I agree, while our minds forget, our hearts always seem to remember.
Such a wonderful comment...
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 6:50pm
This one touches somewhere so deep within that it's an unnamed place. Beautiful and agonizing as only love and loss of love can be.
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 8:28pm
Beautifully spoken, Willow, an unnamed place indeed. Nameless, if you will.
Love and loss seem to be intertwined and when a heart willing to capture its entirety finds us, amazing things are sure to follow.
Thank you for sharing, sweet Willow...
Love and loss seem to be intertwined and when a heart willing to capture its entirety finds us, amazing things are sure to follow.
Thank you for sharing, sweet Willow...
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Anonymous
16th Dec 2016 7:26pm
There is nothing I can say any better than the many above me...breathtaking imagery, captivating in its love and heartache...these lines, just like Ahavati, stole breath from me....
"My heart is used, but unlike
my purse, it is never empty. If I sold it for chips of gold
I might survive another day."
xoxo Taryn
"My heart is used, but unlike
my purse, it is never empty. If I sold it for chips of gold
I might survive another day."
xoxo Taryn

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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
16th Dec 2016 8:33pm
Thanks so much, Taryn, love seeing you here. Your kind words have said plenty and I truly enjoy them on my pages.
Very sweet of you to stop for a visit...
Very sweet of you to stop for a visit...
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
17th Dec 2016 1:37am
' my dreams are merely a wasteland where beauty goes to die ', is very profound; I love it.......
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17th Dec 2016 8:34am
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
17th Dec 2016 6:25am
The narrative of your tale is stunning - heart/purse brilliant - congratulations fine write
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17th Dec 2016 8:45am
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Anonymous
17th Dec 2016 8:16pm
Stunning.
Such profound beauty in sentiments.

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18th Dec 2016 1:53am
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
18th Dec 2016 4:36pm
"I you can take it, it's yours" is the perfect ending for this otherwise dense and allusive poem. It's full of classical, even mythic images, most prominent being the elegant and pained but internally powerful woman, which you weave into a rich little stream-of-consciousness tapestry. Thank you for the read. x
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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
19th Dec 2016 7:08am
Thanks for the visit, I truly enjoy your comments, your kind words, and great critiques. Flattered by the RL as well...
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
1st Jan 2017 8:43pm
Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for Deep Underground Poetry's Featured Poem of the Month Competition. You may view the nomination at the link below, and will be notified if selected.
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9339/
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6th Jan 2017 7:48pm
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Anonymous
6th Jan 2017 6:22pm
I've been seeing this poem on so many RL's that i wanted to come and check and needless to say i'm not disappointed at all. This is truly an amazing write, extremely intelligent and observant, but its the way you deliver that makes it so unique, most definitely a memorable piece.

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Re: Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
6th Jan 2017 7:50pm
Thanks for coming to visit, Vee.
A certain someone sent me your way and I have to say I truly enjoyed reading your work, very beautiful....
A certain someone sent me your way and I have to say I truly enjoyed reading your work, very beautiful....
Re. Tattoo my breast with stars
24th Jul 2017 5:25pm
"Only a savage can capture my heart; if you can take it,
It's yours"
Outstanding!
Beautifully crafted & poignant pen.
Amazing work.
You're amazing Kas.
It's yours"
Outstanding!
Beautifully crafted & poignant pen.
Amazing work.
You're amazing Kas.
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