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The night in the forest sky
Mesmerize my sight
Feed my sparkle light
Shine through the darkness of the unknown why
Libido is displaced
All the shyness fades
right through the night of the forest sky
Distance between vessels
carry through our essence
time is just three hours away from your kisses
Void in perception
Our dimension
where the zero starts and the endless seizes.
My death's perversion
holy diversion
reincarnates the ingredient we are made of
Fantasy's enticement
gets me in alignment
some degrees to west, a few degrees to north
Feed my sparkle light
Shine through the darkness of the unknown why
Libido is displaced
All the shyness fades
right through the night of the forest sky
Distance between vessels
carry through our essence
time is just three hours away from your kisses
Void in perception
Our dimension
where the zero starts and the endless seizes.
My death's perversion
holy diversion
reincarnates the ingredient we are made of
Fantasy's enticement
gets me in alignment
some degrees to west, a few degrees to north
Published 9th Dec 2016
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9th Dec 2016 2:12pm
When the sight of the written word leaves spaces for imagination a write that sparks imagination is born. I feel as if you have told 75% of what is going on, leading me to finish the rest. Great poem.
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- Edited 9th Dec 2016 5:19pm
9th Dec 2016 5:16pm
The subtle rhyme in this is actually rather lovely. The language reflects that this is a love poem very well, and in places it's very pretty. The 'displaced libido' however throws a somewhat darker dimension to this poem suggesting that things might not be as rosy as the later language suggests.
Lovely little piece, thank you for the read :)
Lovely little piece, thank you for the read :)
12th Dec 2016 6:34am
I love giving specific forms in poems with rhyme
thank you Miss_Sub!
I'm happy you liked it
I always give credits to the inspiration, and the inspiration was the source of that love, which you are right to say is not as rosy as I'd like it to be, imagining or writing down. so you caught the feeling well!!
You R lovely, so thank U for the your read :)
thank you Miss_Sub!
I'm happy you liked it
I always give credits to the inspiration, and the inspiration was the source of that love, which you are right to say is not as rosy as I'd like it to be, imagining or writing down. so you caught the feeling well!!
You R lovely, so thank U for the your read :)
