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I once knew a girl
I once knew a girl
Her teeth were as white as pearls
She looked at me through shimmering emeralds
This girl, she had golden locks and curls
This girl, she said she liked me.
This girl, she meant it, it was to be.
This girl, she said she’d be there.
This girl, she said, you’ll see.
I once knew a girl, this girl, she liked me, but I didn’t know why.
I had nothing, I didn’t know how, this girl, she said she’d fly.
I had no goals, no money, no leg to stand on. I was lost.
I once knew a girl, this girl would be mine, and I would be her guy.
This girl, she said she liked me.
This girl, she meant it, it was to be.
This girl, she said she’d be there.
This girl, she said, you’ll see.
I once knew a girl, this girl, spent every dime, every second of time.
Proving to me, how she’d be mine. I didn’t know why.
I wasn’t worth any of it, and I proved it.
But this girl, when I’d call, when I’d text, she’d always reply.
This girl, she said she loved me.
This girl, she meant it, it was to be.
This girl, she said she’d be there.
This girl, she said, you’ll see.
I once knew a girl, this girl, she appreciated my efforts.
This girl, she proved to be a rare treasure.
I didn’t know a good woman, from a bad one.
But I do now, and I’m a broken man, ‘cause she’s gone forever.
I once knew a girl...
Her teeth were as white as pearls
She looked at me through shimmering emeralds
This girl, she had golden locks and curls
This girl, she said she liked me.
This girl, she meant it, it was to be.
This girl, she said she’d be there.
This girl, she said, you’ll see.
I once knew a girl, this girl, she liked me, but I didn’t know why.
I had nothing, I didn’t know how, this girl, she said she’d fly.
I had no goals, no money, no leg to stand on. I was lost.
I once knew a girl, this girl would be mine, and I would be her guy.
This girl, she said she liked me.
This girl, she meant it, it was to be.
This girl, she said she’d be there.
This girl, she said, you’ll see.
I once knew a girl, this girl, spent every dime, every second of time.
Proving to me, how she’d be mine. I didn’t know why.
I wasn’t worth any of it, and I proved it.
But this girl, when I’d call, when I’d text, she’d always reply.
This girl, she said she loved me.
This girl, she meant it, it was to be.
This girl, she said she’d be there.
This girl, she said, you’ll see.
I once knew a girl, this girl, she appreciated my efforts.
This girl, she proved to be a rare treasure.
I didn’t know a good woman, from a bad one.
But I do now, and I’m a broken man, ‘cause she’s gone forever.
I once knew a girl...
Published 22nd Nov 2016
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22nd Nov 2016 11:31pm
23rd Nov 2016 00:06am
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23rd Nov 2016 11:42am
Nostalgic indeed. I don't think I could have laid one down here, more near and dear to my heart. Thank you AEMelia. I'm grateful for the opportunity to share it. Glad you enjoyed it.
23rd Nov 2016 5:47pm
Powerful write CW so fun and light at the start then the surprise twist at the end great job. Sorry for your loss I've been there too
19xx
19xx
23rd Nov 2016 6:02pm
23rd Nov 2016 7:41pm
A tale of tragic love put to an interesting, light hearted, rythym.
Great twist at the end...
Great twist at the end...
23rd Nov 2016 9:59pm
23rd Nov 2016 10:58pm
24th Nov 2016 00:17am
25th Nov 2016 6:33am
This piece is so deeply personal... so vulnerable... so beautiful...
It almost reads like a song, love the repetition in this one!
Of course I felt your pain... a pain I know so well... it made me think: Saudade!
It almost reads like a song, love the repetition in this one!
Of course I felt your pain... a pain I know so well... it made me think: Saudade!
25th Nov 2016 5:33pm
Deep and personal, yes indeed.
It does read like a song, kind of an upbeat pop song, maybe until the latter verses.
This one is a tale as old as time, but, I was called a player the other day...and it really got me thinking, why I'd become this way.
Made me think of my ex-wife, and how she was compared to other people.
Then, this cute little piece was born from my mind.
It does read like a song, kind of an upbeat pop song, maybe until the latter verses.
This one is a tale as old as time, but, I was called a player the other day...and it really got me thinking, why I'd become this way.
Made me think of my ex-wife, and how she was compared to other people.
Then, this cute little piece was born from my mind.
26th Nov 2016 10:33am
You once had a girl, she was clearly your world, but like so many of us guys you went about
all wrong...now this girl you once
knew, flew like a bird n in a puff
of smoke, poof...she's gone...
Yup, sad, deep, mournfully
relateable! Excellent ink bro.
all wrong...now this girl you once
knew, flew like a bird n in a puff
of smoke, poof...she's gone...
Yup, sad, deep, mournfully
relateable! Excellent ink bro.
26th Nov 2016 4:33pm
Many thanks!! I greatly appreciate the feedback! Lol, many of us indeed. I say, before we start a serious relationship in life, everyone should take at least 4 years of psychology. Lol
O'my sweetburninggods,
thank you for the release of tears..
this was outstanding, felt and demands
our souls to rise to feel your summoning
us - you implanted within each verse
a texture of real truth, from both sides of
what happens when blinded by our pains
and inner smudge..
damn it! excusez moi,
-Howlings
thank you for the release of tears..
this was outstanding, felt and demands
our souls to rise to feel your summoning
us - you implanted within each verse
a texture of real truth, from both sides of
what happens when blinded by our pains
and inner smudge..
damn it! excusez moi,
-Howlings
26th Nov 2016 5:42pm
Tears of my own helped paint this little piece. And your wonderful comment gave me a tingle up my spine.
God! What a wonderful feeling. Thank you, wouldn't come anywhere near enough to express my gratitude! But, nevertheless...
Thank you so much!!
God! What a wonderful feeling. Thank you, wouldn't come anywhere near enough to express my gratitude! But, nevertheless...
Thank you so much!!
21st Dec 2016 7:12am
This piece has left me completely speechless for a moment....and tearful eyes....
Such simple truths spelled out from the heart touches the core of the soul and that is precisely what this poem did!
This is what every "good woman" would long strive to hear from a man they once adored. What a tear-jerker! First masterpiece that has made me cry here on DUP!
Amazingly outstanding what heartfelt words on a page can do to the soul...
What a hidden gem I stumbled upon when looking through your pages!!!
Such simple truths spelled out from the heart touches the core of the soul and that is precisely what this poem did!
This is what every "good woman" would long strive to hear from a man they once adored. What a tear-jerker! First masterpiece that has made me cry here on DUP!
Amazingly outstanding what heartfelt words on a page can do to the soul...
What a hidden gem I stumbled upon when looking through your pages!!!
21st Dec 2016 11:38am
Thanks are givin' out so freely here, and, I'm sure each merit's it's own heartfelt gratitude, but, I don't think I have words to express what your comment truly means to me on this one. This is the closest to my heart that it gets. Maybe she'll get to read it one day. Truly grateful, Cyndi_Moone. Thank you!
21st Dec 2016 12:18pm
Don't want to ruin such a sentiment...so I I will let my words be few. But I will say I have played the "Once Girl" in your poem "more than once." So, your poem really struck the chords of my soul....So, I comment as more than likely YOUR Own "Once Girl" would.
For the both of your peace of minds and hearts, your Once Girl and for you, I, too, sure hope your "Once Girl" finds this poem someday and thinks/remembers you....
Again, this is by far the BEST piece that rattled me to the core here on DUP!! (It has very much sentimental value, though it wasn't even close to being written for me personally). Lol. But, as a "Once Girl" to a few in my own life, I sure wish it were....:(
For the both of your peace of minds and hearts, your Once Girl and for you, I, too, sure hope your "Once Girl" finds this poem someday and thinks/remembers you....
Again, this is by far the BEST piece that rattled me to the core here on DUP!! (It has very much sentimental value, though it wasn't even close to being written for me personally). Lol. But, as a "Once Girl" to a few in my own life, I sure wish it were....:(
21st Dec 2016 12:29pm
Perhaps, there is one. ;) You do seem like a "Once girl" :)
(On a page full of metaphorical, subjective angled minds...Take that comment the right way!) :p Seriously, though, thank you again for your sweet and kind words! It's a pleasant refresher in the morning! The world needs more kindness!
(On a page full of metaphorical, subjective angled minds...Take that comment the right way!) :p Seriously, though, thank you again for your sweet and kind words! It's a pleasant refresher in the morning! The world needs more kindness!
I actually read this in a small childlike voice filled with fear, vunerability, sadness, regret and a general lost feeling. Sounds insane I know and probably not your spin on it...but me and my mom went shopping before. I was like 5 and I lost her I thought id never see her again and this poem made me feel like that 5 year old again my stomach literally sank whilst reading.
It's funny how words can mean one thing to one person and something else to another a bit like hearing a certain song or smelling a certain scent and it transporting back to a particular moment in time.
So glad I read this CW!
FC
💜
It's funny how words can mean one thing to one person and something else to another a bit like hearing a certain song or smelling a certain scent and it transporting back to a particular moment in time.
So glad I read this CW!
FC
💜
24th Jan 2017 2:45pm
Fascinating, indeed. But, I believe interpretation brings us closer to the art of another writer, and in turn, brings us closer to the artist.
24th Jan 2017 4:57pm
5th Feb 2017 6:45pm
The theme of some strong love can be found here. However, I felt that the piece's atmosphere of excitement could've been stronger; so I can't say that it's a romance. Nonetheless, your personal narrative is quite emotional.
5th Feb 2017 8:45pm
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