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That's why
Once there was romance
Just walked us a little ways
Moved on while we mused
. . .
To someone who's
So predictable
No matter how much we try
We'll always be one
Because
I'm the naughty girl
She is just plain vanilla
I've the better cards
That's why ...
Just walked us a little ways
Moved on while we mused
. . .
To someone who's
So predictable
No matter how much we try
We'll always be one
Because
I'm the naughty girl
She is just plain vanilla
I've the better cards
That's why ...
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Re. That's why
15th Sep 2016 00:16am
there was romance, once;
it's a game more dangerous than poker.
beautiful lyrics, Chi...
it's a game more dangerous than poker.
beautiful lyrics, Chi...
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Re. That's why
15th Sep 2016 00:24am
Thank you John! There was romance, once ... that sounds much better! But that's you :-).
That's why ... I love your poems.
That's why ... I love your poems.
Re. That's why
15th Sep 2016 00:41am
Miss Chi, this is an intriguing piece. It leaves me wanting to know more of what became of this romance. Brava bella poeta!
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Re. That's why
15th Sep 2016 1:26am
Thank you so much, G_W! I'm glad that the poem leaves you wanting to know more :-). This romance ... is a perpetuum mobile. It'll never end (hopefully) and yet ... sometimes it lacks momentum.
Re. That's why
15th Sep 2016 2:50pm
Loses focus between the 2 stringing them with enjoyment. Sweet triangle written:)
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Re: Re. That's why
15th Sep 2016 11:49pm
Thank you sadsmiles :-). To be honest, it wasn't really meant as a triangle. It's the first haiku that counts, the following haikus were born because I couldn't shut up. Hey, thank you, glad you liked :-).
Re. That's why
15th Sep 2016 7:58pm
Re: Re. That's why
Thank you, Ahavati :-). Glad you read my haikus and took your time to comment on them. The first haiku's the entry, the other two came to my mind additionally. Because sometimes you have to write those things instead of crying. Does that make sense?
Am I back? Just in and out according to the time I've left for poetry (at the moment). I'd love to be here more often and read all the intriguing stuff that's written here! Thanks again :-)!
Am I back? Just in and out according to the time I've left for poetry (at the moment). I'd love to be here more often and read all the intriguing stuff that's written here! Thanks again :-)!
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Re: Re. That's why
16th Sep 2016 9:16am
Damn nice comment :-). Thank you, todski28.
Oftentimes those haikus contain a grain of personal experience. The missing background's perhaps why it may be difficult to set the scene? Haikus are supposed to tell entire stories. That's why I love them. I always struggle to get beyond truism :-). Often enough in vain :-). But it's fun to write them!
Oftentimes those haikus contain a grain of personal experience. The missing background's perhaps why it may be difficult to set the scene? Haikus are supposed to tell entire stories. That's why I love them. I always struggle to get beyond truism :-). Often enough in vain :-). But it's fun to write them!
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Re: Re. That's why
22nd Jul 2017 4:46pm
Sorry for being so late with my comment. Thanks for the nice way of telling me that you like the haiku :-). Sometimes I doubt anybody may beable to detect what I mean. Which would be my fault of course :-). Thanks again, todski28, for the considerate comment!