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Prayer
"My whole existence is flawed
You made me closer to God" -Closer, NIN
I grit my teeth
then my eyes
shut
to the wet
litany
of your tongue
snaking down
my throat.
Somewhere
murmurs slither
over rosary beads
in a candlelit dark
as my legs coil
themselves around you
revolting
to the sharp
pressure of your
grasp
invoking those
dark roars
of fuck me
fuck me
fuck me...
rising up my
throat- Like a prayer
to finish the war
you have ignited
in me.
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mmhm
this feels done. well written, full and complete, polished, yet raw...wow, full respect for this one, darlin'.
"Somewhere
murmurs slither
over rosary beads
in a candlelit dark" - you are an artist... (publish)
heavy, explosive write. mas! [:
"Somewhere
murmurs slither
over rosary beads
in a candlelit dark" - you are an artist... (publish)
heavy, explosive write. mas! [:
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re: mmhm
28th Jul 2011 2:29pm
I'm relieved cos I'm kind of hesitant to post this due to the sensitivity of the topic. Thanks so much for stopping by doll! takecare. x (...and hey I love your profile pic!)
Anonymous
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29th Jul 2011 5:14am
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re: What a....
29th Jul 2011 10:16am
Its magnificent...
Anonymous
20th Oct 2011 3:29pm
"rising up my
throat- Like a prayer
to finish the war
you have ignited
in me."
WOW!
Its breath taking...I am speechless...Can I breath now...please :)
throat- Like a prayer
to finish the war
you have ignited
in me."
WOW!
Its breath taking...I am speechless...Can I breath now...please :)
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re: Its magnificent...
Demigod
Anonymous
10th Nov 2011 12:11pm
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/31692-demigod/
Jesus christ, i think we have the same brain.
Jesus christ, i think we have the same brain.
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re: Demigod
10th Nov 2011 12:38pm
the somewhat similarities of the theme gave me a bit of a chill... a pleasant kind of collective subconscious quirk I'd say. :)
re: re: Demigod
Anonymous
10th Nov 2011 12:52pm
You can call it that if you like :)
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Blown away
23rd Dec 2011 2:21pm
Spell binding metaphors! You have a terrific ability to draw in a reader's eye with action oriented adjectives!
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re: Blown away
23rd Dec 2011 2:36pm
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Anonymous
15th Jun 2013 11:59am
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Re. Prayer
2nd Dec 2016 1:02pm
Nin always was the best.
a rosary is being prayed somewhere far from you;
nice battlefield...
a rosary is being prayed somewhere far from you;
nice battlefield...
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13th Mar 2018 2:43am
Re. Prayer
12th Mar 2018 1:32pm
NIN Closer will will always have intense meaning for me, and clearly, for you lol. Love the duality of starting with Prayer as your title, and taking us down the twisted path. Religious imagery, light and dark, soul and skin...those are the places where I walk, too. Well done.
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13th Mar 2018 2:44am
Re. Prayer
10th Jan 2020 5:18am
Excellent work here, love this so much.. thanks for sharing. :) pleez do comment/ review/ write your thoughts on my website & poems 2 thank you :)
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