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Some fell around, some never found
A semi-translation/semi-original lyrics of a song from a 1948 Hindi Movie "Pyar ki jeet"( Victory of Love), Hindi lyricist :- Qamar Jalalabadi
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eTbk2SIZG3E
one heart is shattered a thousand pieces
whilst some fell around some were never found
the tumbling tear-drops could not be stopped
whilst some fell around some were never found
arrow through the heart , red drops in the air
whilst some fell around some were never found
castle built of hopes torn up by the storm
whilst some fell around some were never found
©KDAmB 2016. All rights reserved.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eTbk2SIZG3E
one heart is shattered a thousand pieces
whilst some fell around some were never found
the tumbling tear-drops could not be stopped
whilst some fell around some were never found
arrow through the heart , red drops in the air
whilst some fell around some were never found
castle built of hopes torn up by the storm
whilst some fell around some were never found
©KDAmB 2016. All rights reserved.
Published 4th Sep 2016
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I guess I'm going to nit-pick about the poem. This line,
"whilst some fell around some were never found,"
was used, in my opinion too much, especially within this
well written (except the line I am talking about being
overused) short poem. Otherwise I enjoyed your thought
process in writing this.
"whilst some fell around some were never found,"
was used, in my opinion too much, especially within this
well written (except the line I am talking about being
overused) short poem. Otherwise I enjoyed your thought
process in writing this.
4th Sep 2016 3:52am
Jerry! Welcome and thank you for your honest opinion...I wouldn't say I disagree with you.. it's actually the lyrics of the song... my bad I didn't write the first lines twice which is the pattern/style of the original song... no nit-picking I felt , rather made me happy to see an honest view coming across! I sincerely appreciate and value it immensely! Thank You for the kind gesture!!
regards
KDAmB
regards
KDAmB
Anonymous
4th Sep 2016 5:32am
Such a passionate, heartfelt piece.
I love the flow. I think it magnifies the intensity of meaning.
The words truly made my heart clench.
Thank you for sharing it. ❤️
I love the flow. I think it magnifies the intensity of meaning.
The words truly made my heart clench.
Thank you for sharing it. ❤️
4th Sep 2016 5:34am
Thank You dear friend!
your kind and generous appreciation has left me speechless! sincere thanks for your visit and kind gesture!
Cheers!
your kind and generous appreciation has left me speechless! sincere thanks for your visit and kind gesture!
Cheers!
4th Sep 2016 1:06pm
Parts of heart & hope must be lost forever with blood & tears for humans to become whole.
And yet we keep searching for the missing.
Sad and beautiful...
And yet we keep searching for the missing.
Sad and beautiful...
5th Sep 2016 00:15am
Welcome Dear friend!
Thank You so much, you put it much better than the poem itself... no flattery. Bull's Eye! 🎯 yes indeed we keep searching those missing elements that make our being. One again my sincere thanks for your appreciation and visiting with me.
Cheers
KDAmB
☺
Thank You so much, you put it much better than the poem itself... no flattery. Bull's Eye! 🎯 yes indeed we keep searching those missing elements that make our being. One again my sincere thanks for your appreciation and visiting with me.
Cheers
KDAmB
☺
6th Sep 2016 1:10am
6th Sep 2016 1:18am
