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Nostalgia
I sigh with nostalgia,
for the kingdom I once knew.
Ruins and dystopia.
I sigh with nostalgia,
for my erstwhile utopia,
all faded, gone from view.
I sigh with nostalgia,
for the kingdom I once knew.
for the kingdom I once knew.
Ruins and dystopia.
I sigh with nostalgia,
for my erstwhile utopia,
all faded, gone from view.
I sigh with nostalgia,
for the kingdom I once knew.
Published 26th Jul 2011
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8th Aug 2011 1:33pm
I liked the assertion of being in the middle of nowhere, but maybe reduce the abstraction n one can see the true state of your nostalgia
8th Aug 2011 6:16pm
Thanks TM.The poem is actually about the destruction of a great kingdom of which the author was a key part.I was trying to drive that aspect home rather than the listlessness of being in an abstract nowhere.Unfortunately,triolets force the author to tell the whole story in just 8 lines,unless one is skilled in the art of double/triple triolets(which I'm not...yet).Thanks again!
