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A cry for help
Stressed out and annoyed
Looking for things to fill the void
And I try to sew up the wound
But its gaping maw
Still consumes me
Tired and a liar
I build my own funeral pyre
I burn myself with my own tears
It’s no wonder no one hears me
Looking for things to fill the void
And I try to sew up the wound
But its gaping maw
Still consumes me
Tired and a liar
I build my own funeral pyre
I burn myself with my own tears
It’s no wonder no one hears me
Published 18th Aug 2016
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19th Aug 2016 00:51am
22nd Aug 2016 00:38am
19th Aug 2016 9:08pm
I really like it, especially the "burning with your own tears" part, as it's so paradoxical, which makes the message even stronger.
The only honest critique I'd give is that the 2nd line of both paragraphs maybe feels a word too long.
The only honest critique I'd give is that the 2nd line of both paragraphs maybe feels a word too long.
22nd Aug 2016 00:38am
