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Howling
In the darkness, the soothing sting invades
making vocal cords expand out into the air
They fly and screech.
They scream
and whale
Then the mighty
A howl...
The pleasure grows….
The sting again,
bottomless and profound,
touches the pleasure walls
lined with liquid love
The sound elongates
past the black clouds
And the luminous circle above
The mighty howl.
A serenade so sweet
so sincere
A lover’s accomplishment
When ever the highest peak,
the valiant climax,
is drawing near
making vocal cords expand out into the air
They fly and screech.
They scream
and whale
Then the mighty
A howl...
The pleasure grows….
The sting again,
bottomless and profound,
touches the pleasure walls
lined with liquid love
The sound elongates
past the black clouds
And the luminous circle above
The mighty howl.
A serenade so sweet
so sincere
A lover’s accomplishment
When ever the highest peak,
the valiant climax,
is drawing near
Published 6th Jul 2011
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Anonymous
6th Jul 2011 5:27pm
What a great way to capture it in words!
Really liked this:
"The sound elongates
past the black clouds
And the luminous circle above"
Looking forward to the next 'luminus circle'.
tornado
Really liked this:
"The sound elongates
past the black clouds
And the luminous circle above"
Looking forward to the next 'luminus circle'.
tornado
Anonymous
14th Jul 2011 4:18pm
oh "so sweet", great poem!
14th Jul 2011 4:34pm
I appreciate the way you tried to avoid the obvious, and take a path less traveled. There's so many so-so erotic poems on this site it's not even funny (or erotic).
I'm not sure I like "pleasure walls" but that would be the only thing that sticks out for me (and not in a good way). Notwithstanding that you already use the word "pleasure" once prior.
Otherwise, I think it's a nice original effort. A breath of fresh air in a dirty, soiled genre.
I'm not sure I like "pleasure walls" but that would be the only thing that sticks out for me (and not in a good way). Notwithstanding that you already use the word "pleasure" once prior.
Otherwise, I think it's a nice original effort. A breath of fresh air in a dirty, soiled genre.
20th Jul 2011 1:50pm
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