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Thrill Me She Said
Thrill me she said,
to the light of the moon
from the song of a god
cellos dear father Neptune,
Thrill me she said,
bembe 10 thousand daemons
lost in the forest’s
enchantment and screaming,
Thrill me she said,
long kiss me in breezes,
or put a knife in my adroitness
I roll with the seasons,
Thrill me she said,
for I’m lucky to see,
that the best
will never let the worst in me be.
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Re. Thrill Me She Said
26th Mar 2016 2:05am
This is good. Passionate. Love the rhyming. daemons and screaming. "bembe 10 thousand daemons" this line is interesting and stood out. The use of bembe and the spelling of daemons adds a latin flair. I enjoyed the opening line to each verse, and what that might entail. I feel like something more could explode with this. Vibrant. But still, you have beautiful words.
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Re: Re. Thrill Me She Said
26th Mar 2016 12:22pm
Bembe is a tribal drum with deep resonance. The word is from a book I read about a hunter. The spelling was important and I like that you saw the Latin. My vulgar Latin tongue! :) Thank you for the great comment.
Re. Thrill Me She Said
26th Mar 2016 3:10am
Re. Thrill Me She Said
26th Mar 2016 9:41am
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Wicca, I never did mess with any of that. I have no more religion or ritual than that of the man in the moon, I just rise everyday, brush my teeth and comb my face and show up for class and learn all I can. :) I adore you John, thank you.
Re. Thrill Me She Said
Reita, I get fuck'n weak in the knees when I read your shit. The elusiveness of your brilliant diction is just fuck'n lovely, my dear...
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Re. Thrill Me She Said
28th Mar 2016 3:14am
Re: Re. Thrill Me She Said
28th Mar 2016 4:16am
Taming the beast. It is thrilling. Life's thrilling. We must never believe everything we think, but damn I scare the shit out of myself sometimes. :) Thank you so much for the compliment.