Symbiosis

I liked your poem, but I got a sense that the emotion behind it is really just far too big to adequately put into words.  I think this leads to a sense that the poem is incomplete.  Maybe that's okay, maybe that's the whole point.

Definitely a solid effort though and some good metaphor.

Thank you. You sensed correctly. There is no adequate words for the emotion behind this poem. And the I wanted to leave a sense of incompleteness. I normaly write to much and leave nothing for others to relate to.

Thank you kindly for the comment.

I love the drift of your words here, a bit dark but pleasant. Well done, madame.

Thank you, every time I receive a comment like this it gives me hope to try again and that I might be starting to get some of it right :)

You picked up on the underlying darkness that few picked up on. Everyone I showed this to only thought that it was about love...which it is, but it is also about so much hurt and betrayel and the knowledge that I cannot leave. Do not want to leave...

Thank you for the kind words.

As with Darkbee, you saw more to my words than most and it is deeply appreciate...