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haiku for my other
as fever took me
I found your breath in my mouth
and so nirvana
for my muse...
I found your breath in my mouth
and so nirvana
for my muse...
Published 16th Dec 2015
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17th Dec 2015 5:48am
17th Dec 2015 2:04pm
Yes.. yes, yes, yes... great thanks... the line as originally posted was "I felt your breath in my mouth." I stared at it for an hour... then "why can't I find what's wrong with the line?" palm to forehead, smack!
iv:
‘Twas even then at break of when it all began, our thoughts exchanged between the alter ego of each one in observation, cock of minds, their curiosity...
( “Patina” cont.)
♎️💞♍️
‘Twas even then at break of when it all began, our thoughts exchanged between the alter ego of each one in observation, cock of minds, their curiosity...
( “Patina” cont.)
♎️💞♍️
