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Open Your Eyes
Waiting for you to see my
heart wants only you
my body Needs only you.
Wondering will you ever see, it's me you need
it's me that will make you see life is just
a dream so just dream...
Open you're eyes, and let me
in your heart. so i can free your
loneliness.
Published 15th Nov 2015
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15th Nov 2015 6:34pm
I've felt this way myself. As they say, it is easier to make the physically-blind see than the willingly-blind. I say likewise for those indifferent. Constructive criticism: Repeat same/similar words less frequently for a more dynamic poem.
25th Feb 2024 00:59am
On the themes of love, sometimes what is close may be too difficult to see. That closing stanza was warm and reassuring.
Nicely penned.
Nicely penned.
