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Heroin my heart (Hero in my heart)
I can see him in the mirror
A reflection questions, "Why are you here?
His touch is like no other, I'll never want another
This man of whom I speak
Is a dangerous venom to me
A hero in my heart too
Is like a drug, poison to you
He calls me Lover,
Calls me friend,
Then he turns on me again
Dr. Jekyll, Mr. Hyde
I can't see who he is inside
He plays head games, I don't understand
Then makes of me high demands
In a prison locked
To my heart toxic shock
He stands guard
Like a Hero in my heart
2 souls tied, in the first world age
Sentenced to life on an empty page
My punishment of his silence
Is my solitary confinement
Tears run down my cheeks, as my heart bleeds
knowing I can never leave
Like Heroin in my heart
My addiction plays a part
He stands guard night and day
He's the hunter, I'm his prey
(POV) More to come-being co-written with Poetikmind
A reflection questions, "Why are you here?
His touch is like no other, I'll never want another
This man of whom I speak
Is a dangerous venom to me
A hero in my heart too
Is like a drug, poison to you
He calls me Lover,
Calls me friend,
Then he turns on me again
Dr. Jekyll, Mr. Hyde
I can't see who he is inside
He plays head games, I don't understand
Then makes of me high demands
In a prison locked
To my heart toxic shock
He stands guard
Like a Hero in my heart
2 souls tied, in the first world age
Sentenced to life on an empty page
My punishment of his silence
Is my solitary confinement
Tears run down my cheeks, as my heart bleeds
knowing I can never leave
Like Heroin in my heart
My addiction plays a part
He stands guard night and day
He's the hunter, I'm his prey
(POV) More to come-being co-written with Poetikmind
Published 23rd Oct 2015
| Edited 28th Oct 2015
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23rd Oct 2015 10:12am
Wow... Boy did somebody jump the gun? lmao... anywho, this is so powerful, so beautifully touching...
I can only hope to do a response justice! :)... Stay tuned my friend :)
I can only hope to do a response justice! :)... Stay tuned my friend :)
23rd Oct 2015 1:12pm
Very very strong piece Elle. 👍🚨
"I can see him in the mirror
A reflection questions, "Why are you here?
His touch is like no other, I'll never want another "
Love that..a reflection questions....you do a fine job of keeping up this jeckyl n hyde flip..this wouldnt have worked without that clever inference. But you did..and this does..work. There are a few themes..the hero..the drug like addiction to the turmoil and passion..and the dr Jeckyl and Hyde aspect. A difficult juggle but you kept the balls in the air!
Po was right to be moved enough to write a great companion piece to this.
Fine job lil lady!
Love
Jennifer
"I can see him in the mirror
A reflection questions, "Why are you here?
His touch is like no other, I'll never want another "
Love that..a reflection questions....you do a fine job of keeping up this jeckyl n hyde flip..this wouldnt have worked without that clever inference. But you did..and this does..work. There are a few themes..the hero..the drug like addiction to the turmoil and passion..and the dr Jeckyl and Hyde aspect. A difficult juggle but you kept the balls in the air!
Po was right to be moved enough to write a great companion piece to this.
Fine job lil lady!
Love
Jennifer
23rd Oct 2015 1:11pm
Thank you so much for such detailed feedback. I was trying to do multiple comparisons that fall into sync. I'm happy to know you enjoyed this piece so much. Thank you again!! 😊
23rd Oct 2015 1:39pm
