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wandering thoughts of perplextion
swirl into Universe
dance among stars
frolick with dust
of creation in time
smile with love
of all that you see
for life but a dream
sweet nonchalance
it's all in your hands
to make it sweet
or if you so please
fill it with pleasure
but don't stray far
into the road of hate
you'll poison soul
and wander creation restless
lost in the void
of physical manifestation
truth will be denied
and sorrow will insue
but it's all up to you
the choice is already there
given to chance
of what you might do
dance among stars
frolick with dust
of creation in time
smile with love
of all that you see
for life but a dream
sweet nonchalance
it's all in your hands
to make it sweet
or if you so please
fill it with pleasure
but don't stray far
into the road of hate
you'll poison soul
and wander creation restless
lost in the void
of physical manifestation
truth will be denied
and sorrow will insue
but it's all up to you
the choice is already there
given to chance
of what you might do
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Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
18th Oct 2015 11:22pm
So melodious and sensual skeeze..lol cant sp the other..
DNA love and lust..
From the galaxy dust we were created from..
Really liked!
Love
Jennifer
DNA love and lust..
From the galaxy dust we were created from..
Really liked!
Love
Jennifer
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Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
25th Oct 2015 10:39pm
Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
20th Oct 2015 3:40am
Aww gosh, you're holding my lungs
with this one,.. geesh.. ok must fan
my eyes quickly..hold on will be
back..
-Howlings
with this one,.. geesh.. ok must fan
my eyes quickly..hold on will be
back..
-Howlings
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Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
25th Oct 2015 11:13pm
Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
25th Oct 2015 10:39pm
Very interesting poem you made here,
Very sweet too, I admire the visual imagery. It makes me feel like I'm in space when I read it lol.
Great poem, definitely one of my favorites
Very sweet too, I admire the visual imagery. It makes me feel like I'm in space when I read it lol.
Great poem, definitely one of my favorites
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25th Oct 2015 11:17pm
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25th Oct 2015 11:23pm
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25th Oct 2015 11:31pm
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25th Oct 2015 11:38pm
I just read your newest one, it was brilliant.
You have such a knack for this kind of thing hell better than me ;)
You have such a knack for this kind of thing hell better than me ;)
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Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 00:00am
Your style is brilliant as well don't doubt yourself :) btw looking foward to the end of your stories ;)
Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
I won't, but I still think you're the brilliant one ;)
Glad you like my stories there is still more to come :)
Oh and btw I like your new profile pic it's really cool
Glad you like my stories there is still more to come :)
Oh and btw I like your new profile pic it's really cool
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Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 00:21am
Thanks for the compliment :) and your stories are brilliant too
the pic is the evil and good inside us all the choice is in us
the pic is the evil and good inside us all the choice is in us
Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 00:24am
Well I try my best to make them good :")
I like my readers to visualize and understand what I'm writing and at the same time relate to it.
I have always found the yin and yang very interesting because of what they stand for.
I like my readers to visualize and understand what I'm writing and at the same time relate to it.
I have always found the yin and yang very interesting because of what they stand for.
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Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 1:25am
And you do an amazing job at it so keep writting and if it would be possible I would be interested in doing a collab piece if you're down
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26th Oct 2015 1:28am
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26th Oct 2015 1:35am
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26th Oct 2015 1:36am
Sure! :)
But first I need to finish my " Gangster & Good Girl" story then I will let you know when I'm ready to collaborate
But first I need to finish my " Gangster & Good Girl" story then I will let you know when I'm ready to collaborate
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Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 1:40am
Of course I don't want to take time from your own stories and poems :)
btw what made you want to write that story
btw what made you want to write that story
Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 1:44am
Hm well a number of things really, went through a break up a while back that was pretty tough on me so it was kind of a way to release my anger, another reason why was because I wanted to write a story that some people could somewhat relate to like growing up in the hood for example or losing both their parents, and just wanting to write something more serious and not something soft or too sweet.
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Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 2:12am
You did an amazing job with the story the pain, the hope, the grittiness also the dark humor at points all tie in although the romance threw me off a bit but it added a little twist that is enjoyable
Re: Re. wandering thoughts of perplextion
26th Oct 2015 5:04am
Lol Well you should've saw it comin when the title literally said " The Gangster & The Good Girl" lol.
But I'm happy that you enjoyed it, it was my favorite story out of all of the stories I've written :)
But I'm happy that you enjoyed it, it was my favorite story out of all of the stories I've written :)
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