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grey...
out walking
this evening
is grey
grey buildings
grey rain
bows
drained
rows
of veins
flow
with
grey...
out walking
this evening
is grey...
grey clouds
in our
eyes
and I smoke
telling
lies
and you
choke -
and the flies..!
out walking
this evening
is grey...
Published 18th Sep 2015
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19th Sep 2015 00:10am
O Paul, mo Chara....
A rather, somber scribe...for you...
I can feel the underlying, monochromatic melancholy of this piece....and how nothing seems clearly defined by black and white....but rather overshadowed in shades of grey....
( i truly identify with a moment like this...)
A rather, somber scribe...for you...
I can feel the underlying, monochromatic melancholy of this piece....and how nothing seems clearly defined by black and white....but rather overshadowed in shades of grey....
( i truly identify with a moment like this...)
19th Sep 2015 1:34pm
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19th Sep 2015 1:35pm
19th Sep 2015 11:23am
I really like this Paul. I like the hint of 'rain bow' in the middle of the poem. The inclusion of which that makes the grey so much more dismal. Fantastic writing!
19th Sep 2015 1:39pm
thanks very much, it's a bit more
'worked on' than my usual stuff -
the trouble with that is knowing
when to stop, not something I
normally worry about in the more
spontaneous pieces...
'worked on' than my usual stuff -
the trouble with that is knowing
when to stop, not something I
normally worry about in the more
spontaneous pieces...
19th Sep 2015 1:38pm
Paul I can relate to this mood piece and everything being grey..
great ink..
with love Crim
great ink..
with love Crim
19th Sep 2015 1:41pm
19th Sep 2015 2:18pm
so well written. I can actually not only see the grey, I can also feel it
LIKE much :-)
LIKE much :-)
19th Sep 2015 5:08pm
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