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When It's
When its all about that feeling..
When its all about the words..
When its all about the times we have together..
When its all about just having fun..
When its all about just letting go..
When its all about being myself..
When its all about not having any other care in the world..
When its all about the little things..
When its all about being happy..
When its all about the hugs..
When its all about who actually cares..
When its all about whos important..
When its all about who, at the least, makes you smile when you cry..
When its all about who makes you feel better when your down or depressed..
When its all about the positive and good..
When its all about forgetting the rest..
When its all about pure happiness..
When its all about smiling randomly..
When its all about being comfortable..
When its all about love..
When its all about trust..
When its all about being together..
When its all about us..
Its all about you.<3
When its all about the words..
When its all about the times we have together..
When its all about just having fun..
When its all about just letting go..
When its all about being myself..
When its all about not having any other care in the world..
When its all about the little things..
When its all about being happy..
When its all about the hugs..
When its all about who actually cares..
When its all about whos important..
When its all about who, at the least, makes you smile when you cry..
When its all about who makes you feel better when your down or depressed..
When its all about the positive and good..
When its all about forgetting the rest..
When its all about pure happiness..
When its all about smiling randomly..
When its all about being comfortable..
When its all about love..
When its all about trust..
When its all about being together..
When its all about us..
Its all about you.<3
Published 7th Jun 2011
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8th Jun 2011 2:02am
Nice poem, its from the heart and those are my favorite poems, if you want to read my poems for inspiration then feel free, just let me know if you like them
8th Jun 2011 2:06am
8th Jun 2011 3:58am
I'm not a fan of repeating words, I think it's an easy way out.. That's my opinion, if you take all the repeat out it's actually a good poem
Anonymous
8th Jun 2011 8:19am
Actually, your poem would have worked really well if you started it with "When it's all about", and added each line without that part. It would have been great! ^_^
Anonymous
8th Jun 2011 5:00am
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8th Jun 2011 6:07am
I agree with Gigi, may have worked better without the repartition. with the exception of the second last line, really like that ending
"When its all about us..
Its all about you.<3"
"When its all about us..
Its all about you.<3"
8th Jun 2011 9:05pm
Yeah. But the point of this was im saying all of the things that happen when im with that person adn everyting. So at the end i said its all about you. Do you get what im trying to say.? And i knoe repetitve isnt very smart but those are my only two poems that reapeat like that so dont worry i dont do it all the time. Andi i didnt do it for an easy way out. But thanks for helping ;]
8th Jun 2011 9:18pm
