Evening with Eve

Original sin never sounded so good. I hope she thought the fall from grace worth it.

Apt biblical ring with its employment of 'snake', 'sin' and 'fruit'. (Don't think the Garden of Eden had curtains LOL.)

I appreciate your comments. this poem was actually written in one of D.U.P.'s competitions where I had to write a poem using the words
-MARMALADE- JUTE- SHAKE-
I did. I had never even heard the word jute. Investigated and learned.
I wrote this poem not as a picture of Adam and Eve,
but using the symbolic content for that story
I read it to a woman friend of mine who loved it
and told me that I should post it for others to read
And so I did..

Good write archetype, I generally am not fond of erotic but this serves to be well written, and flows exceptionally

Glad you posted this one. I love the asymmetrical rhyme scheme and how well it flows and paints such a sensual picture. I'm not sure I would even categorize this as "erotic" so to speak, as I feel that category has a stigma that is not always quite so artistic. I'd like to think of this as "sensual".

Also I love it when poetry challenges me to investigate new vocabulary -- which this did, with jute, as you pointed out in a previous comment. And I feel like this word, combined with the other descriptive words, paints a sort of sultry, tropical scene for me.

Nice ink!

Nice! I dig when a guy writes erotica with such tenderness involved. And this is absolutely erotica. The bulk of my writes are and they are most certainly pieces of art. So are Taryns.. Good erotica is absolute art, in its purest most primal form. Cave mens first art surely was about Animals and fucks. Not fucking animals, pardon, but you get the drift.
Cave sex art.

I widely digress, jeez jen.

Essentially, great sexy ink! It is sensual, ARTfully done, erotica. Most good erotica is. You dont get to talk about original sin in such a unique way without it being in that category. And like the guy earlier, enjoyed the way you clevetly wove it in.  frankly its was unexpected from you. Not the quality mind you, but subject matter and the delicate of intimacy. I had you pegged differently. Enjoyed you. Fun knowing you are quite multifaceted.

🐍🍎
Jennifer

Thank you for your comment. I always like when a pretty smart girl gives me a compliment

I'd like to clarify that I never meant (in my previous comment) that this piece was in the WRONG category or miscategorized.  
 
What I meant by my comment was that I wish there were a SUB-category of erotica -- sensual. I feel erotica is a really broad category that a lot of "fuck-filled" work gets put into. My comment was not meant to be offensive in any way. It was meant to be an even greater compliment; as in, this piece transcends some of the cruder, "fuck-filled" work I've seen on this site and truly captivates a more sensually erotic scene that I have a deeper appreciation for.  
 
And I'm not trying to discount "fuck-filled" pieces. I appreciate a steamy, crude piece when written WELL.  
 
This piece is written very well. Without being fuck-ridden.

Thanks, Harliequin. Having a few beautiful women compliment me and give a shit about me
is sometimes a realization of what women want and what I have to offer