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Louder than words...
He noticed my tam o'shanter,
he was ugly as sin, but the thirty
minute conversation that followed
was enchanting; the bridge, the dirt road,
the girl that couldn’t drive a good nail
fucking to save her own skin.
The white strips and navy trousers
seemed to go on forever; the poetry
on scrolls scrubbing ship decks,
he hurts her but still she loves him,
this time will be different,
she just needed to change
her outfit to go to her own burial.
Jodie and Travis are in love,
they hold hands all around the grill area,
I tell them to stop, someone will get burned
when the moment is louder than words,
as loud as hell, they never listen.
Published 2nd Aug 2015
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2nd Aug 2015 8:47am
"when the moment is louder than words" ... Brilliant line!
The conflict is presented wonderfully here ... Bravo!
The conflict is presented wonderfully here ... Bravo!
3rd Aug 2015 12:31pm
5th Aug 2015 5:35am
I appreciate that :) It was blurred and I was leery about the last line and thought maybe I would adjust it. I think I'll leave it alone just for the hell of it; (no one listens anyway ;) I respect you both so much, thank you.
2nd Aug 2015 10:41pm
Life - People - Society - Civilization? the Poem?
Not to do with the poem: I simply cannot deal with loud people; my ears slam shut. And yet I am completely empathetic to a certain cry of familiarity because it is where I've been and I see their pain for what it is; hurt and confusion, and perhaps no one has ever reached out to them in a way of true understanding, and just listened. Look at the history of criminology - it takes a thief to catch a thief, that's how it began. Perspective. Its not so cut and dry. Most people can't even hear life at her finest. It is the most beautiful listen. Yes, It is a mistake to try and convince anyone of anything (its a self thing). Thank you for the comment.
3rd Aug 2015 9:49am
some times some of us can just see
the grief, pain, & sorrow others among us are gonna
create over a lifetime in lieu of a sickly disawareness of their
'me'.
well said in few words
the grief, pain, & sorrow others among us are gonna
create over a lifetime in lieu of a sickly disawareness of their
'me'.
well said in few words
5th Aug 2015 5:00am
I play in way and out day on the upidstay. :) Its a mute point. Thank you so much, Dan.
3rd Aug 2015 12:30pm
Love, of the hope of never listens! And neither do we. Becoming human is brave, but we have to in order to see who accepts us as we are. Another beautiful write.
5th Aug 2015 4:47am
"Becoming human is brave, but we have to in order to see who accepts us as we are." There were tears, Ahavati, and I love you, thank you.
5th Aug 2015 5:31pm
